This morning whilst washing my face
Preparing myself for the day
I noticed something I hadn't noticed before
A sign of my advancing age
Hidden in my sparse facial hair
I noticed a sprinkling here and there
Of grey follicles amongst the brown
I didn't know whether to smile or frown
But now I think I quite like them there
I hope they'll give me more character
And something approaching a distinguished air...
Time's marching band marches staunchly on and on
And we'll all be in it merrily banging on our drums.
Author notes
I'm not all that old and I look even younger than I am. This was written as if I was an old man .
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This made me think and made me smile at the same time. It has beautiful flow, and the rhyming here and there really fits the poem.
Two things I really loved: first, I loved how the poem doesn't despair of growing old, but almost welcomes it; it shows the true wisdom contained in the poem, that growing old is nothing to fear.
The second thing was my favorite: how you compared time and life to a marching band. A beautiful and vivid metaphor, and it really made me smile.
I wish you the best of luck, and keep writing and improving your poetry. ^__^
Aeris Silverlight
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excellent well done
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great little charmer. I really did grin reading this. Its a nice comforting read about the one thing we are all afraid of.
its a form of acceptance, and rejoicing in our realities.
I would recommend that in the second stanza you dont use the word hair twice, however it still worked well...
other than that, this is a lovely read.
thanks for entering
Emmy
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Yay! I have already commented on this one, but will do it again. Re-reading this, I have not changed my opinons about it at all. Awesome piece. It conveys truth of what happens to us as we grow older. Also, I find your rhyme most excelent. Most people cannot rhyme anymore. I am one of them. So hard to rhyme latley, but like I said. This is sheer brilliance. Thanks for entering. (Even though I kinda forced the entrants to enter...) lol.
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love the last 2 lines
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Well, man, it happens to all us, including the best of us! Just don't think that you are old or something becuase you aren't...lol. Thanks for a great share!
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i think gray hair or the occasional salt-and-pepper-sprinkle are very attractive....
and absolutely distinguished...
: )
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