This Wall of Flesh
Brave this wall of flesh with me.
Remove threads of despair.
A rain of sweat so sweet we stain
These sheets is in my prayer.
The last wish in my book of love?
To feel our bodies mesh.
We've talked 'til words are all run out.
Now! Brave this wall of flesh.
Why does it stand; a barrier
To love we wish to make?
I beat it with my lance of love,
I feel it start to break.
You pound it with your velvet glove.
We breach this wall of flesh,
Each eager to surmount and top.
Sweet sweat pours down, so fresh.
It stains our souls. This sweet sweat fount
Erodes the wall, the wall.
Is nothing, only love remains
The barrier was small.
A lance of love held tenderly
Within a velvet glove.
In sweet sweat rain forever is
The picture of our love.
Author notes
Well, that came out strange. I hope it's what you're looking for.
this wall of flesh=the trouble have getting past talking to touching
threads of despair=thoughts of despair
my lance of love=guy part
your velvet glove=gal part
We breach this wall of flesh=nookie
It's funny, but as a leftover thought from this I used a line in another thing I did yesterday; "Then no more words, just sweet, sweet thoughts that rustled on the bed." which also =nookie.
A contest entry
- Roots by Pamela A Lamppa.
1750 points, ended March 23, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is quite sensual and your kennings are "well placed"
Amazing what can be done with words. Excellent poetry. ~Pamela
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Glad you enjoyed.
It's a bit unusual for me. Just the right day I guess.
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What an absolutely beautiful piece of poetry. So smooth is your meter and rhyme here and the words so wisely chosen...very nicely done indeed
Ruth
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Thanks.
I seem to have entered a somewhat honest and rather eloquent pahase. Silly me!
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It is a lovely piece and quite sensual, which is always welcome.
One small request: Could you please list the kennings you used in your author's notes, as per contest rules? Thanks in advance.
~Hetha
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I do think this is exactly what the contest holder is looking for! Your rhymes are excellent, and I thought the "kennings" were well-used here. Well-done! Lita
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