She sits in her
room. Razor to
her wrist. She
makes one mark
and lets the blood
flow. She can't stop
it from flowing.
Can't stop the
cutting. She does
it day after day
never caring what
anyone thinks or says
to her. She cuts
over and over again.
"I like seeing the
Crimson blood"
she says as she
slides the razor
over her awaiting
wrist. She thinks
over and over as
she slices her arms
"I can't stop"
Author notes
I have been through this. I know the feeling of cutting. I myself just stopped a few weeks ago. So I truly do know the feeling. This is how I felt at the time.
I was 8 when I started
Went on ages
8
9
10
12
13
14
15
16
and I am now 17 but just recently stopped.
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I'm seriously enjoying the explanation you gave for cutting; that it's just an addiction. Plain and simple. You just can't stop. It's as if there is no real reasoning. You just do it because you have done it for so long that it has become a part of you. And though, it may look and be bad... it's something that in a way makes you happy. Nice work.
Also, thanks for following the rules.
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This is so sad!
I don't know what to say!
Cheer up!
Everything's go to be okay. -
i feel like you couldve given more of an insight into what you were feeling at the time, sitting there with the razor. and i think when writting a poem over some thing like cutting one should be extra careful in what will be written. in order to separate it from the thousands on this page and every where else. keep the ink flowing, and good luck in the contest.
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Visual poetry is just as good as any other, and although the language is very simple, it leaves a very strong impact. IE the red font over black. Very impacting with this poem, as if the poem is seeping from the arm itself
I can really sense the internal struggle, because even though she seems to like the act, "I can't stop" isn't usually a good thing.
I'd revise the ending to the second Stanza "She cuts over and over again" is repetitive, after hearing "she does it again and again" Maybe change one of those to "time after time" or "slice after slice" or something to that effect. It gives the sense of repetition without the sense of redundancy.
Strong lines were:
"Crimson blood"
"I can't stop"
"Makes one mark, lets the blood flow" -
Possibly too stark for me to comment on
Free verse is my weakest discipline so my comments are also weak
Vivid enough though
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i feel like this 24/7
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It made me think of a few weeks ago...
It was beautiful...and amazing.....described it perfectly...and reminds me of how much I miss it...but yeah...you described this wonderfully, and only some people truly understand how it helps cope...
AMAZING
Keep writing,
Annie Shadows
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I have to say this was a little triggering for me. It's not that it is glorifying self harm, it that it is so similar to what I used to write in my journal. I know from experience how hard it is to stop this self destructive behaviour, I've only stopped a month ago. I like how real you made this, it's like you are taking the reader through your feelings and motions. Good job and good luck in the contest.
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i found out today that my son's half-sister has been cutting. being an addict, i know that anything that is an addiction is difficult to stop. i pray for everyone who is in this situation. thank you for sharing this with me today. i wish you well in this contest that we both have entered. viyanna rosemarie
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