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My feet

My feet are small and bare I know,
my blisters take in stride,
my arches drooping now will show
I've traveled far and wide.

I see my feet are weak but true-
have served me well throughout.
However, when I see your shoes,
I'm quickly filled with doubt.

Your shoes-they fit your feet so well
to lead your passion's call,
but on my feet its hard to tell-
they may not fit at all.

Author notes

Metaphorically speaking- "To fill someone else's shoes"

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  • Broken-Rickie
    March 20
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    I really like how you did this. Amazing job...


  • Ithica silver member
    March 7

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    I love this!!! hehehe!!! It has a "special" meaning for me... Just perfect!!!


  • CaliOkie silver member
    March 1

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    Perfect rhythm and rhyme. This is so well done. Your structure is perfect and so very natural sounding . . . excellent.

    You may have inspired me to return to my rhyming roots. It has been a while.

    Very well done.

    Garrison


    • Nickelspring gold member
      March 1
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      Thank you!! I think rhyme is underappreciated!
      Thanks for stopping by!!
      KW~


  • LovelyLauren
    February 26

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    I really liked this one. It touches on something that I rarely see, and that is someone admitting that it's possible they wouldn't be able to walk in someone elses shoes. "but on my feet its hard to tell they may not fit at all." I absolutely love that ending. Perfect.


  • Truetome
    February 26

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    this poem is wonderful. this is such a dar' poem you have written here. I enjoy the meaning you carry through within your poetry. L,


  • Skybow silver member
    February 25

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    Wonderful take on the prompt! It was a lighthearted easy to read poem and a good metaphor for "Filling someone else's shoes"

    The rhyme enhanced the read too, Loved it!

    Good luck in the contest.


  • Mirthryl
    February 22

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    Excellent imagery, loved the "arches drooping." Very nice "weak but true."
    Interesting considerations of another's shoes--will you care to take them where they are accustomed to going, and how strong will the former owners imprint (or odors) remain? Excellent abab rhyming and flawless meter!

  • Rowan gold member
    February 22

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    I knew as I read this what metaphor you were depicting, as I use it all the time. Well done.
    Thanks so much. Last stanza flowed effortlessly.

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