The air is getting heated
And the storm is on its way
I know I shouldn’t be here;
The time’s come to get away.
Stop breathing up my oxygen,
My heartbeat's drumming dance
Don’t take away my oxygen,
This is my only chance.
The sun breaks into pieces
And the golden light is gone
Entire world in darkness,
All is faded that once shone.
Stop breathing up my oxygen,
Why don’t you feel my pain?
Don’t take away my oxygen,
Don’t snub this dying flame.
The heavens split right open;
Heart monitor is beeping,
When all the world is silent,
‘Tis time for endless sleeping.
Been breathing up my oxygen,
Stolen away my sun;
Been crying tears of oxygen,
And now look what you’ve done.
A contest entry
- The Ultimate Pre-Write by starjacket.
650 points, ended May 16, 2009, 25 entries
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Comments
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wow katie this is really interesting
i love it! 
xxx
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Interesting. I like it. Although, the only thing that caught me out of the rhythm is the second stanza. The two oxygen lines seem a bit chopped? I dunno. Maybe it's just me.
However, in total, I like this piece. It's darkly enticing.
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