"I love her"
He said, and we were done.
He did it to me.
He did it to him.
His very best friend...
And he doesn't care.
Doesn't he see what is happeneing?
Cant he see how selfish he is?
Will this pain ever let up?
Will it ever end?
I can't find another like him.
I don't think I want to, either.
Love is something to be shared...
Not wasted...
The worst of it all is that he isn't even with her..
He broke his friend's heart..
And then just left it.
He decided to take that other chick instead...
Again.. It's his lack of caring..
How could someone so sweet and loving,
do such a heanous deed?
How can he live with himself?
Yet...
Alas... I love him still...
All I want...
All I need...
It's right there... But it's not mine...
Joe Greco
Author notes
Poem I wrote a while back as a free-write... Decided to add it.
I no longer love Joe Greco
A contest entry
- Help me reach my 2000 comment By entering your poetry by Night Terrors.
400 points, ended May 11, 2009, 243 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Hm... Help me add more imagery?
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great poem you really told a fasinanting story here.
The Positives:
I love the emotion and descriptions also great imagery
Room For Improvement:
Nothing I can see you did wonderful
My Favorite Part:
The worst of it all is that he isn't even with her..
He broke his friend's heart..
And then just left it.
He decided to take that other chick instead...
Again.. It's his lack of caring..
How could someone so sweet and loving,
do such a heanous deed?
That part was really attention grabbing
Overall:
I give this an 8/10 you did great. I hope to see you in my future contests thanks so much for entering.
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this is very good. such a powerful write. You've got a 4 for this poem. You have a total of 7 points. thanks for entering the contest and best of luck to you. kahy -
Amazing!!
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marvelous job on this piece!
strong emotion and imagery here.
Bravo!!!
♥ Kate -
I love this poem
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Thank you!
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