'Yes...' She thought, as she strode forward with a graceful lope..
'I'm in my element.. Now more than ever....'
You're never truly safe until you are free... And that's just what she is. Free. There is no one to judge her, to tell her what's right and what's wrong. No one to say what is to be.
Here, on the dark streets.
Now, at the dead of night.
She is free to roam and stretch... No longer entombed in the smothering walls of civilization.
'Humans destroy everything good.. I'm ashamed to be one....' Thoughts flow lazily through her mind.
She stops and looks up at the fathomless sky, and takes a deep breath.
As she closes her eyes and exhales, she begins to change...
She slowly, effortlessly transforms from a human form into something... Beautiful.
Her sence of smell sharpens as her nose elongates, her legs grow more powerful as they take their true shape.
Her pasty white skin shimmers as a beautiful coat of silver fur appears.
Her eyes, once a watery, weak blue, stand out in the night now, sharp, golden yellow disks... Staring ....
She stretches, splaying out her legs, emphasising how majestic she truly is. She shakes herself once, and bolts.
She's running with a grace and power, her breathing in sync with the timing of her pawsteps.
She leaves the city, she runs as far away as she can...
Once more she lifts her head to the sky.
Full of pride for her kind, she lifts up a howl to be heard by all....
Within moments, all the rest of her pack has joined her, baying joyfully at the moon....
Free.
xXx
Author notes
Written for my sister, quoting many things she has said to me over the years. If you have anything at all you think I should change, just tell me please!
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Hm... Help me add more imagery?
Comments
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sounds to me like you are talking about a werewolf. I am guessing but I amsume you are. I love were anything so that is great to me
The Positives:
Lots of wonderful imagery I really love what I see on this
Room For Improvement:
Nothing I can see you did wonderful
My Favorite Part:
Her eyes, once a watery, weak blue, stand out in the night now, sharp, golden yellow disks... Staring ....
She stretches, splaying out her legs, emphasising how majestic she truly is. She shakes herself once, and bolts.
She's running with a grace and power, her breathing in sync with the timing of her pawsteps.
i so loved this bit I think the whole thing was great.
Overall:
I give this an 8/10 you did great. I hope to see you in my future contests thanks so much for entering.
~*~Apathetic Poison~*~
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it was a good poem but you should tell what it is in the end. my guess is a wolf but you should tell us. i also think it may be slightly to long maybe shorten it up a bit. otherwise it was an amazing poem that i very much like and i hope that you make more like this let me know if you do
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