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Then you kept Calling Back

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You cried as you said it was over, you'd fallen out of love
I felt the roof begin to cave in

horrible weight from above
you said you'd always  love me, just that it wasn't the same
love wasn't love like I heard it

forever, as they claim.

You went on to find someone else  

 kept me on a string
I rushed to answer my phone whenever it started to ring.
Sometimes I'd hear your voice 

 believed you'd come back
we could start over I knew it,

to me you were everything

But, I was just there to please you,

 when you were bored I guess
kept in a drawer to amuse you, someone you could possess
a pathetic monkey on a chain, begging for any small scraps
back in the cage when you'd used me

cringing from your slaps

You tore a vital piece from me,

 my heart the casualty
 made me feel small and worthless,

pitiful,

empty


Still, I'd be yours for the taking if you were here today
I loved you then and always, forever it always will stay

 

 

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  • Sandygram
    February 20

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    Heartfelt Words

    Hi Ed, Beautiful and somber words of sadness and lost love. I know the feeling well you speak of. I say if a person falls out of love they never truely loved with all their heart to begin with. There are those who confuse physical attraction and infatuation with true love and are soon on their merry way leaving the one who did truely love with the sadness and broken heart to mend. There are many who play that game and many of us who get hurt by it.
    A wonderful poem of heartache and longing. Amazing rhyme and flow. Always a pleasure to read your poetry. Take care. Hugs and Smiles.

    Blessings, Sandy


  • truembrace
    February 19

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    i always wonder how the person on the other end feels: guilty at all or not. I've been in the position as the one to leave and felt the most terrible wrenching inside for the other person as no one deserves to be hurt like that. And, I read something such as this and cannot imagine how it must feel to imagine things might have been as though the other person were "toying" with affections.

    To say the least this is heart-wrenching. It's also a very well-written poem with a solid form. The rhyme in this was just enough to keep the reader attached from one section of stanza to the next where it ties in. Really well done overall and certainly thought-provoking.

    I hope this does well in the contest!

    Kim


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    February 19
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    Oh this is so very sad. A love that means the world to you that isn't returned with such fervour, is something that haunts all who have been through it. To be used then tossed aside when convenient is very much like a slap in the face.
    Such a haunting piece.
    My best wishes to you in the contest.
    Gaylene


  • Di Shirley
    February 19

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    Well penned

    You have captured pain that we all have felt or will feel at some stage in life. No one is free from the pain of love. The line between pleasure and pain.
    Heartfelt. Yet we keep coming back for more.
    How true. God bless.


  • Denerica
    February 19

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    You sure make it hopeful that someone could love you again...again you captured the raw, nagging pit of emotion of being rejected and unloved. Blessings.


  • BonnieQ silver member
    February 19

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    Poignant, Painful

    This is exceptionally well written, dearest Ed. I haven't seen the photo, but I imagine you painted a rather accurate picture of a manipulator; for those are the kind that keep on a string their former lovers. Unfortunately, it is all a game for them; yet, sadly, they cannot get past the blush of romance. When it cools down, as it always will, they are off to find another.

    Excellent writing worthy of GOLD!

    Luv & hugs, SisBon


  • ennovy silver member
    February 19

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    when one is in love alone, it so sad....too be on the outside looking in, and see a friend....is bad enough...but to think of a man hurting like this or a woman is a vividly a sad concept and it fits the contest so well......excellent write...Novy


  • azlyn gold member
    February 19

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    This is just so heart wrenching. Sounds so familiar...that first love that just stomps on your heart. This really moved me emotionally...thanks for sharing this and best of luck in the contest!


    Az

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