because I stopped
I watched the melting snow
the way it slipped away
its form in ice skin
glistening
as winter leaving
inauspicious
tired and done
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interesting and arresting
I agree with the comment about this being reminiscent of Frost - "Stopping by Woods..." perhaps? I saw it as symbolic of a death, not necessarily an unwelcome one. It's as though a moment has been frozen or slow-motioned and the vision enriches with that which we often miss in our haste.
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yes. i have felt this. the way winter leaves - spent.
i like how you have almost slowed time in this - capturing a moment in time with the perception of snow melting.
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excellent language
in this shorty but goodie!! i love the last two lines. wonderful!
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Awesome job again, MoH. hanks for the brilliant share! Keep up the great work!
Best wishes to you!!!
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Very good.
It's nicely written and gives good images. -
you really got a strong image across with this.
i loved it.
"glistening"
^^ perfect word choice.
keep writing.
x
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Throughly enjoyed this piece. There seems a gravity in the second stanza, which begins to weigh on "winter". Excellant writing, riminiscent of my favorite poet, Robert Frost.
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Wow great details you used!!! I could picture this when I was reading it. Great job!!!
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