The breeze was warm on my back.
Weekends at Lake Geneva comforted;
reprieve from the horrific abuse.
(My parents never did open their eyes
to their benign neglect)
Minnows nibbled at my toes,
while boys and girls played in groups,
tossing colorful balls about and floating.
I twirled around, alone in my thoughts.
At eight, my thoughts were darker,
and the look on my face kept others at bay.
I felt funny in my tummy that day;
all twisted in knots and painfully nauseous.
I rested in the sand, burying my feet and hands.
A surge between my legs startled and frightened me,
making me lose my breath as the blood drained.
The red sand stuck to my thighs, as I rose to my feet.
I hurriedly walked home, leaving bloody footprints.
Cars slowed, and concerned drivers asked if I was ok.
“Yes,” I always responded, knowing it was just my period.
I was anxious over the amount of blood pouring down my legs.
It was a surreal celebration of sorts when I reached home.
“Our baby’s all grown up!” my eight year old ears heard.
Tears ran down my cheeks as I writhed in cramping pain.
Our weekend was cut short, and I felt guilty.
It seemed I always ruined the family’s fun one way or another.
But more and more unresponsive I became,
as I was rushed to long time friend and family doctor.
A hush fell about the hospital room where I was admitted,
as I received blood transfusions and test results were read.
“It must be a mistake,” my mother whispered, “She’s only eight.”
A D&C was scheduled for the very next day.
I was never allowed to see my best little boy friend again.
Little did they know the daddy was an adult.
Author notes
Write me a poem that tells a story..I don't care what it is about as long as it moves me.
31. Tell me a dark secret. And I mean DARK. Make me feel how you feel bout your secret. Guilt, disgust, devious, naughty, sexy, wild, anything! Make me feel it.
3. write about an experience you have had that has changed your life, make me feel the way you do about it.
2. Emotions. I don't care. Make me FEEL. Pain, despair, or outright bubble-up. (I was going to use the option of telling you a story in 30 lines or less, but this is 9 lines over 
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Comments
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Wow. That's deep and painful. It makes me wanna cry....I'm sorry, but I'm speechless. Best of luck and great write.
Matt -
This is such a sad and powerful write. The way you've written this adds a lot of strength to the words and I can definitely feel the emotions here.
The ending is just heartbreaking.
I could feel the words and the emotions from them in the pit of my stomach. I hope this isn't a real story, and I'm so sorry if it is. -
My! This is utterly horrifying to know ! Gosh I'm soo sorry that you faced that
I must say this poem is amazingly penned, got my heart racing at the last part. Thank you for entering
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Great poem - very moving and powerful.
Great job. Good luck in my contest and thank you for entering. -
Very Nice
Although I will have to take under consideration how many trophies you have already won with this poem, I will still majorly consider it for a possible finalist position. Thank you so much for entering my contest and I hope to hear from you more and read more of your work. Things like this happen in every day like and it is sad how things like this happen. I love it and it really did move me, thank you again so much. -
Beutiful poem, horrid plot. Deep and moving as poetry should be, thanks
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That was so so sad. I am so so sorry. OH wow. I am speachless after reading that poem. It was beatifully written but so so sad. I am sorry you had to experience all of these awful awful things. Thank you for entering my contest
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unbelievable
once i read rthe part about the red sand... i knew it had to be more than a period! although i never ended up pregnant... i was raped as a child, even sadder it was my 5th birthday... my heart goes out to u... and to all those children alike! wonderful piece ( well written wise)... good luck in the contest, u seem to do real well with it....
much love and respec
Rae
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WOW!! that was really well writen, Im sorry you had to endure that, no one deserves it! I can relate in a way. Well good luck in the contest and everything you do. Thanks for entering.
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wow.... im really sorry ...
the poem was beautiful....i dont know what to say
it was amazing in every sense i feel for you honestly
thanks for the entry and good luck!
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omg....such a twisted ending. thats sickning and just wow... great write. thank you so much for entering my contest and best of luck.
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This was incredibly upsetting. As a poem it woul dhave been even more emotional in prose type form, but it read as that anyway, and I got the full impact. the bit that hit me was the "red sand" part. It was almost haunting.
Still, more imagary would have carried it even further, but the scene was set so perfectly I didn't need as much, I saw and felt everything.
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At first I was like, where is this going? The end was a slap in the face. This is pain. This is raw. This is great. Thanks for entering and best of luck to you.
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'Minnows nibbled at my toes,
while boys and girls played in groups,
tossing colorful balls about and floating.'
Beautiful imagery in this part.
thanks so much for entering,
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This is...I don't even know what to say.
Poetically: This is beautiful, great. Amazing. This flowed so well together.
Personally: Im sorry. I'm very, very sorry.
That is all I can think to say to you. Thank-you for entering this piece into my contest. -
I only didn't have the option for children because it's quite rare. I mean, pregnancies, not abuse.
I'm finding it hard to comment on this... poetically it's great, you have terrific abilities, that's clear. On a personal level, I'm just very sorry.
I feel that is all I can say.
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this has alot of emoton in it and is really well portaryed. made me think and also brought tears to my eyes. really well written.
good luck and thanks for entering -
i first thought that you were saying that the first time you got your period was the worst time of your life.
but this is much darker. the beginning is a little confusing. is it meant to be a flash-back? -
The iraducle sanity of this dark shell is kept hidden for the best part, it left me guessing, leaving me breathless my air coming in short gasps hollow and shallow. Until the end. It's no let down, the abusive treatment so radical it's horrid.
I hope this never happened to you, gosh i don't think i could bare it if anyone so young suffered that...
Best of luck,
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Yes, true story
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I hope your abusers are dead. there is not a day that goes by that you are free. past is always present we can not get away on a plane bus fast car or fast horse. I wish you more peace. your poems always touch me . I am usually cloaked because I have so little time. My heart always goes out to you.
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An incredible poem about an unbelievable story...I admire you for writing such a beautifully poem about something so painfull and disturbing ...
you are a great poet, I like many of your poems and every trophy you get is deserved...
keep up the good work!
take care
Suza
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This scares me, that there are people out ther who would ruin a child like that. I am so sorry. I hope you find closure someday, and you will.
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wow... don't know what to say.....
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I'm absolutely speechless.
I just do not know what to say.
This was especially heart-wrenching for me. I'm sorry for all you went through . . . I can't even imagine.
The imagery in your poem was amazing. There was a steady flow to it that made it (as strange as this sounds) comfortable to read. Not comfortable in content, but in flow. Thank you very much for entering my contest. -
Excellent- I think you may even have put more into it than that. The subject is common but your details changed it so it wasn't over heard or too done up. Thanks for entering.
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thanks for entering.
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Wow. Just wow. I can't even fathom that. You're one strong woman just by making it through that. Thanks for entering this contest. Good luck!
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Wow what an incredibly powerful poem. I am so sorry
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wow this is an incredible write. it has an innocent touch while beholding something so gruesome and horrific. i had to read it a few times not because it was hard to understand but because i wanted to feel everything over and over. excellent job! off to the finalists! good luck!
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Eight.. that's far too young.
Very sad. Espeically the 'best little boy friend' part.
Thanks for entering.
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Wow. This is brilliant. It's so f***ing sad. I felt every word of it. Just....wow.
Thanks for entering my contest, and good luck. -
Wow. This is definitely very good. It really got me thinking. It was an amazing piece. Good luck in my contest
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i remember reading this before.... but i cant remember where. i liked it then and i love it in this contest. great write to say the least
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this broke my heart.
every single piece of it.
disturbing as it is, it still holds much beauty.
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oh my god. this is incredibly painful to read. this is absolutely heart-wrenching. the ending is very powerful and sad.
goodluck and thanks for entering -
this is a really great write from you. congratulations on the entries you have already received and i would like to thank you for entering my contest and i wish you well in this contest. viyanna rosemarie
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This is a lovely piece. thanks for entering. and good luck in my contest. and thank you for following the rules
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This is beautifully dark and borders on the distrubing. I love it. I do hope for the sake of your sanity that this was fiction. All in all a very good write.
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Great write, keep up the awesome work. Thank you for entering this piece and I wish you the best of luck in my contest. Spread the awerness.
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such wonderful imagery. congratulations on the well deserved trophies you have earned with this write. thank you for sharing it with me today and i wish you the best of luck in this contest you have entered. viyanna rosemarie
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I was left a little confused at the end. The "best little boy friend" and the fact that the father was an adult kind of muddles this a bit. I'm at a loss at the end. The rest of the piece was very strong and disturbing though.
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I was settled, and comfortable in the story but then it ended. Just too short for me. I mean, you're talking about a serious subject and you basically sum it up in just a few verses. Granted, they are long verses but this is a deep poem, with a deep message, and I just felt it could've had more depth to it. As it is, it's good but I think it has the potential of being quite better than that.
-Nam -
Speechless, as the person below me said, is exactly how I feel right now. This has so much emotion welling up inside it; from sadness, to anger, to pure, heartwrenching care for the child in this poem. The last line was a real twist, and made me shiver even though it's a warm day here.
All I have to say is "Wow." A powerful poem, and it takes real bravery to write about a subject like this.
I wish you the best of luck, and keep writing and improving your poetry. ^__^
Aeris Silverlight
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speechless
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veryy very nice i love how it opened so descritive
and i love that
it flows wonderfully
and its a great story..
sad
but amazing
you have a way with that
and i see that you have already on some contests with it
but i love it
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wow!!
OMG this made me
wanna cry soooo bad.
Great write tho
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I LOVE how descriptive this is!
Horrid, unthinkable, and beautiful.
The last line simply gave me chills.
You've already gotten two wins here, but this was very well written.
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...wow...just beautiful...the whole story had such an amazingly descriptive and detailed amount...I would have never guessed the ending assuming that the period was the worst of it...very very very well done and thank you for entering...I apologise on my tardiness...
Oliver
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... words may not be sufficient
but the emotion was deep and the flow and verse precise.
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I like it. It was very nice, and i could almost amagine the scenes within the words. nice write and good luck.
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amazing and very well written. i felt every line and saw it all in my head. the inagry was perfect.... im just sorry to hear that that imagry had to happen to you. Much love!!!!!
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Very deep. Thank you
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So sad, good luck
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Oh! I am so sorry that this happened to you. I had a similar experience. I had to really struggle to make it through. At last I am starting to coupe with this. Maybe it has made me a better person. Then again I am kind of sadistic now so maybe not.... Any who great poem very nice structure and I love how this is written. I am going to add you to my finalist list. This is just the kind of thing I was looking for. My favorite part was:
Minnows nibbled at my toes,
while boys and girls played in groups,
tossing colorful balls about and floating.
I twirled around, alone in my thoughts.
At eight, my thoughts were darker,
and the look on my face kept others at bay.
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Wow. This almost had me crying, considering that there was so much emotional stress in this. I think it would have fit better under the options, make me cry, and melechony, however. So option 6.
Thank you for entering, and good luck in the contest. -
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Thanks for the clarification
I changed my option #
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Very emotional, personal write. Well done.
Good luck in the contest.
summer51
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oh my god.... did this really happen to you????!?
thats awful, but it was so intense. it almost hurts to say that that was really good....
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Oh my gosh! I really did not expect that ending. This was a sad, very sad write. You did an excellent job choosing for this prompt. Great write!
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Sad--So sad---A very heartfelt write that tugs at the heart.
Well written and versed!
Well Done & Best of Luck in the contest!
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This is a sad, yet great work. I'm sorry this happen to you. Keep on writing, your very good. God bless
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i think this will also do well
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oh my god. did this actually happen? omg. s
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what a twist at the end. so sad but well done. thanks for entering..
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wow that was really sad. you almost had me in tears! you should have put this under the option "make me cry". however, i can understand how you put it under that other option.
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Thank you for entering my contest. This isn't what I am looking for. My bad, for not making that clear.
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Oh my God, this was heartbreaking. Well done, thankyou for entering and good luck!
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Oh my god
that was so sad, i literally started crying. that is so sad, anybody who is willing to do that to their daughter should be shot, or better yet put in prison to rot. you are very brave for sharing this, and it makes me so sick, to think about the pain you must have been through. i am so very sorry. who would think that an eight year old could have a period? very good poem, very good imagery, and yet so very sad
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oh, just so you know, it wasn't my father. But thank you so much for your thoughtful and heartfelt comment. I truly appreciate it
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*tapping my heart* I want to run to this child and give her a mother's hug. I feel sick at the thought of a man doing this to an innocent child. I cannot imagine or want to imagine what this has done to one life. Peace & Love sent to you. Thanks for entering & sharing.
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Holy shit. That was the first thing that popped into my head here, forgive the language.
This was just horrific. Stark and effective, I could picture this all in my head and felt so very sick...
I don't know what else to say.
Thank you for entering my contest and good luck
Shari
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*sigh* I'm sorry.
Gawd, I only just finished crying for myself and now you've set me off again =P I know what that's like... not so young but I know what it's like to get pregnant from rape/abuse. ='[
Very sad write and really well done
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Oh, my... god... I think I sat here for five minutes just staring at the screen unable to process what my eyes had just read... Eight? How... this is true? I'm sorry... that should never have had to happen... were they that ignorent? God... I can't even cry about this type of thing anymore, it happens too often... Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.
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This is just so painful, and what is even more sad is that way to many of us can relate. I can say I did not cry, my heart hardened to the words as a read. I do not cry any more. I am sorry, no little girl should have to live or shut out her childhood. It is good to deal, understand and make sure we protect the young ones around us. Many blessings to you my dear, and may you walk in light and love always.
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oh, wow this is sad and really should never happen, wow i actually felt i was there, its so sad, great write, thanx for sharing with me!
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My name is Nelena, and I am your contest co-host.
WOW! Ok you have definately done a number with this, and take that to the highest compliment you can. The ending of this really was powerful! You explained it to the audience in a still mysterious form. I am overly impressed by this poem. Thank you so much for submitting! -
I hurriedly walked home, leaving bloody footprints.
Cars slowed, and concerned drivers asked if I was ok.
“Yes,” I always responded, knowing it was just my period.
I was anxious over the amount of blood pouring down my legs.
It was a surreal celebration of sorts when I reached home.
“Our baby’s all grown up!” my eight year old ears heard.
Tears ran down my cheeks as I writhed in cramping pain.
Our weekend was cut short, and I felt guilty.
It seemed I always ruined the family’s fun one way or another.
But more and more unresponsive I became,
as I was rushed to long time friend and family doctor.
A hush fell about the hospital room where I was admitted,
as I received blood transfusions and test results were read.
“It must be a mistake,” my mother whispered, “She’s only eight.”
A D&C was scheduled for the very next day.
I was never allowed to see my best little boy friend again.
Little did they know the daddy was an adult.
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Oh my g..
aaww sweetheart, it took tremedous courage for you to post this, I had no idea..I don't know to say except ..I'M SORRY FOR YOUR PAIN..
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speechless
I am at a loss for words dear sister. I am so very sorry you had to go through this much pain at such a tender young age. I wish I could hold you in my arms right now and take away the pain. this was perfect and pure gold.
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this has to be the best and saddest poem i have ever read. I can relate to it so well. God i cant stop crying. I think i am crying both because the fact you had to go through so much but also cos i have been there too. God i am so sorry. i dont know what to say or do. I am so sorry. and i am so sorry i havnt been there for you like i should. I am just a mess. im sorry. but im alwas here for you, as much as my head allows if you get what i mean. xxx
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Wow
Oh my that is come confession. Makes for a great poem. Best of luck in the contest.
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