Words that arc across vast emptiness
make moments of eons in nature's feast
consumed galaxies, plucked lives of stars.
Love that conquers the chasms of loneliness
fills the tiny bare space
between the pole and axis
of self and infinity;
then frantic antic pace sublime
to streets and byways, taxicab crazies
or fast lane pain, loss and gain, and race
to clamber upon boards of fast moving trains
or findings: mysteries in grains of sands,
reflected noble light, gleaming points in night
further then sobful mourn
the fall of every oak and maple prayer
as Autumn sheds its life for winter, then gives birth
prima vera evolves glistening green of sunsplashed days
and rush to forswear all waiting; the love of swoon
and silver light earthy airs of summer night;
so much they might do, so many to touch
with emptiness
if only the spirits they see
a world of art and costless beauty
would haunt their ways,
and show the world above the page
is the true stage - - for virtue.
A contest entry
- Why Did I Join Again? (Rant Included) by Allyce May.
13200 points, ended March 10, 28 entries
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This is one of those poems that requires more than one read, and I do it happily! So many lines that stood out, for example "make moments of eons", "plucked lives of stars" and
"fills the tiny bare space
between the pole and axis
of self and infinity".
My single suggestion is to remove the ellipses because I disapprove of them when there are commas and semicolons available Other than that, this is a real beauty! Descriptive and wonderous and thoughtful.
Thank you for sharing
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sometimes normal grammar feels like shackles in poetry, but these ellipses are just a bad habit...
...thanks...PK
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Oh. This is a nice little poem that you have penned in here.
It is filled with big ideas and alot of stuff that sounds very philosophical. I guess what I'm trying to say is that it does sound like you've been thinking of all this stuff for awhile and are just getting it down on paper. You did a good job of expressing yourself here.
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Unfortunately there are more virtual than real, and so many people forget what is showing 'outside the window' (in both worlds).
Very, very good thoughts!
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The whole world is on a stage...and we all play part in the havoc of life...You have captured the essence of our universe, seasonal change. The beauty in your words speak vividly with colorful methaphors....another excellent poem full of talent.....(a tasteful rant)..................novy
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