I caught her smile
as quickly as the silken bubble
enclosed her breath.
It hovered for a while
over the perky waves
of laughter
and then burst.
It must have collided
with a tongue-tied rock
(one I had tossed into our lake
a word or two ago).
She giggled, “I was aiming
for your nose.”
“You’re so cute” I blushed.
She got my heart instead.
Author notes
Whether my muse still has the Feb 14th bug, I don't know, but here's my little (late) Valentines gift to you.
In a list
A contest entry
- write. (invite only) by chilali.
600 points, ended March 6, 2009, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I think that I am going to add you to my favorites. You are talented.
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awww. i love this.everythiing about it!
thank you so much for entering love 
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Good poem on romantic thoughts coming from your perspective. I enjoyed reading what you had on your mind. You did splendid! Best to you in the contest!
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this is a delightful read that i would not change one bit, it is very imaginitive and has a lovely feel to it, full of youthfulness and young love. it makes the reader feel the lapping of the water on skin as laughter is heard above the waves. a very expressive and creaful write, please do not alter it it is simply devine the way it is. it has a random layed back feel to it that is just casual enough to make it lifelike
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Thank you.
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