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No salvation for the weak

 

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Genuflecting to the unknown
                 while purgatory looms
                            and hail mary's consume


Soul rattles empty

                   spiraling......

 

Through the gates of
                         absolution...

 

Yet death remains
                    your domain

 

and the haunting echo of pleas
                            are left whispered on the breeze

 

 

 

 

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  • nature
    July 24, 2009

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    Wonderful lines...

    ...make you realize life's truth.

    "Yet death remains
    your domain
    and the haunting echo of pleas
    are left whispered on the breeze "
    ...And truthfully fascinating.

    Wish you all the best in the contest.


  • Poetic Tasha Moderators member
    July 6, 2009

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    hauntingly beautiful & soft somehow.
    brilliantly penned,

    Tasha


  • Wandering Woodchuck gold member
    June 22, 2009

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    Nice job. The weak shall not inherit the earth? Sometimes I think this was dreamed up by politicians as a comfort to those who they wanted to keep in line.

    Mike


  • Sandra R Reynolds gold member
    April 12, 2009
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    Powerful write leaves much to think about.


  • delightfulmess silver member
    February 24, 2009

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    oooh this is some powerful stuff....

    Soul rattles empty

    spiraling......


    That part gave me chills... Bravo


    Delila


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    February 19, 2009

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    Certain echoes hauntingly beautiful and tragic
    Well versed hun
    Best wishes Julie x


  • Cannonsfire
    February 19, 2009
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    This is stunning hun C


  • goingnowherefast
    February 19, 2009

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    and the haunting echo of pleas
    are left whispered on the breeze
    amazing


  • wildflower. gold member
    February 18, 2009

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    Oh gave me chills! Haunting piece.
    I love it! Fabulous take on the prompt!
    Thank you for entering and good luck

    ♥ Katie

  • AngelKat42
    February 18, 2009
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    good luck sissy

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