As far back
as I can remember,
there have been words,
rolling like the plains,
like wheat, blowing in the wind,
peaking like snow-capped mountains
reaching for the stars.
Words, trilling,
like the lark in early morning,
babbling like the brook,
Words
glowing flame red
at sunset.
Words,
making promises of love,
singing the sweet song of regret,
strumming the blues beat,
and the soulful dance.
Behind my weary eyes,
they are there still,
tracing the pulse,
flowing like blood in my veins,
feeding the madness,
keeping time with the heartbeat,
following the cadence of every breath.
As long as words and I exist,
there will be no death.
Author notes
This won silver in previous contest
Toomysterious in iquidmindforever contest silver category
A contest entry
- Poetic Madness by MuddyKing.
1000 points, ended March 1, 3 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - PREWRITES THAT HAVE WON BRONZE OR SILVER ONLY by liquidmindforever.
400 points, ended May 31, 99 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ROUND II PREWRITES FOR BRONZE & SILVER TROPHY FINALISTS ONLY by liquidmindforever.
500 points, ended June 14, 7 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Dear Poet,
Welcome to Round 2 Prewrites for Bronze & Silver
finalists.
Wishing you the best
until then
stay
liquid -
Enchanting. Whimsical and lyrical.
Dear Poet,
Thank you for entering your poem DISEASE OF
THE SOUL into my contest: PREWRITES FOR BRONZE & SILVER TROPHY WINNERS, ONLY
Words indeed create entire worlds; I think some
one far Superior has told us that...
Enjoyed the magic of your words,
Best wishes,
and stay
liquid
finalist -
The presentation of your verse is compelling...
And that is only the beginning.
I felt this one all the way through.
Very natural, the flow~
the way each line floated you to the next.
I too congratulate you on the silver gained,
this piece should be adorned with a shiney!
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Quite enchanting and very relatable for me (and I am sure others). My only teensy suggestion is in the following lines:
"Words, trilling,
like the lark trills in early morning,"
I might consider removing trills after lark since you just mentioned it in the previous line. Purely my two copper!
Good job!!
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Thanks so much for your comment and I agree with your suggestion. Hope I'm up to writing again soon, I've been reading some of yours and they are very inspiring.
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Oh my - this would fit my current contest completely. What truisms spoken in this piece, and may I congratulate you on your wonderful trophy. They don't come easily from MuddyKing - and I can certainly see why he chose to recognize your poem.
Excellent.
As long as words and I exist, there will be no death. - our piece of immortality, so to speak.
A pleasure to read such fine verse. I will have to study this style some - quite effective.
Thank you for sharing your poem with The Blue Lamp.
~Pamela
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I absolutely love this! I felt every line and the impulse to run with those words. This is outstanding.
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this is a fantastic read, its so true.
its a writers craving that cant be broken.
a bond.
lovely to read, and im glad you were rewarded for it
jezz
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Truly poets love words, they move mountains and draw veils to bring out the beauty in this world. I can see why you shine Silver with this one.
As a poet I relate to this poem and applaud you for writing this beauty. I loved it!
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depth is what held me
wonderful
peace Muddy
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ah bravo a wonderful take on the promt I love your imagery and depth throughout good luck in the contest
maralisa
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The last two verses in this make the poem. I feel the same way. I love it.
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