you hurt me
and hit me
make me fall to the ground
and though it hurts
I take it all
why?
because I just can't let you go
everything about you
makes me weak in the knees
and even though
I cry myself to sleep
I just can't let you go
no one has ever had
such control over me
over my being as a person
over my emotions and tears
over my mind and soul
I just can't let you go
you've made my heart bleed
torn it all apart
many times before
and yet I stick around
in hopes that you'll change
why?
because I just can't let you go
my life would be so much better
without you in it
but I don't know what I would do
if you ever left my side
it makes me so confused
why?
because I just can't let you go
through all the pain
all the bruises you've left
my heart lets out a sigh
you have a spell on me
that makes my reality hard to see
why?
because I just can't let you go
Author notes
previous contest I entered this in the person said it wasnt what he was looking for but I thought that it fit his contest well. oh well. guess I was wrong haha. he didnt kick it out but just just rather told me it wasnt what he wanted.
prompt #4
A contest entry
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Comments
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I pretty much agree that it was not what the host was looking for, but I do understand how you could come up with the idea from his prompt.
I also agree that if this is the situation that you are in: Get out. Now.
You have written this well, it is a structured and organised thought process, circular and confused in nature but covering the important points and the frame of mind of a person in that situation.
It reads and recites fairly well and is clear in its meaning.
Good luck in the contest and I wish you well.
Adrian.
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Let the Jerk Go
Baby Doll ,Let the jerk go.You can do better than that.Oh my daughter is mad.She dont want to share her daddy with nobody.
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Nice poem...not what I wanted....I don't hit women, not saying you think I do, but I don't want this to make me look like that. Hope you understand and you deserve better if you are being beaten.
Michael -
wow.
this is amazing. very nice take on the prompt. good luck in the contest.
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