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[haiku] - Beach Day

 

      sunday afternoon
crack of thunder and lightning
                    lifeguard clears the beach



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traditional haiku
5-7-5

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  • suseann
    February 19

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    A Haiku sense of alive rolls through this expressive verse just like this author's mention of thunder.It takes me as a reader there in that moment.


  • grannyeri gold member
    February 18

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    Liked your haiku - and the ones others wrote to you as well. LOL . Have to start writing again myself - will have to begin - think you inspired me with your write.


  • Arkbear gold member
    February 18
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    Not bad Mal....love the visual....but...

     

     sunday afternoon
    crack of thunder on the beach

    sand in running butts

     

     .....would have been better :) )

     

    Wonder why you & Naughty did not collaborate *wink*

     

    Thank you for entering,

     

    Bear ~

  • Naughtygrlred
    February 18

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    or how about...

    nice....


    waves come crashing in
    walking naked on the beach
    blankets, sand in butt




    • Malabu
      February 18
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      ummm why don't you enter it and along with it your profile avitar lol too cute you are...

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