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Basic Instinct

Basic instinct guides me to a point of no return
A thought, a strange, strange thought
Doubting slowly, minding carefully, disbelieving
Anxiety wraps around a skeptical outlook
Chance

Basic instinct guides me on a silver tight rope
A dream, a grim, grim dream
Reaching slowly, walking carefully, praying
Reached the point of equal distance
Beginning and End

Basic instinct guides me on a path of thorns
My feet, such weak, weak feet
Moving slowly, stepping carefully, trying
Fought past a flurry of icy tears
Melted, rolled and dried

Basic instinct guides me through a room of beating hearts
My feelings, such fragile, fragile feelings
Creeping up slowly, slowing down carefully, shaking
Relied on a promise that awaits its completion
Created, smiled, waited and sighed

Basic instinct guides me below a sky of shouting thunder
My sight, blurred, blurred sight
Grasping slowly, breathing carefully, cringing
My constitution has failed my conviction
Ready, quivered, agonized, affected and imploded

Basic instinct guides me to your voice
A hope, joyful, joyful hope
Needing slowly, longing carefully, motivated
An invalid in search for a new source of energy
Standing, walking, persisting, reaching, smiling and loving

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  • Rogue
    February 19, 2009
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    Brilliant

    Excellent as usual. Too wordy? Not even. You're win.


  • lainey--saurusrexx
    February 18, 2009

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    Positive:

    Great imagery, and wonderful word choice.

    Negative: A bit too wordy and repetitive at times.

    Keep writing! :]