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The Marriage of a Virgo and a Capricorn x 1 ¾

I want to cleanse your body and refresh your soul,
With hot creamy lotions so let us both rock-n-roll,
There is music in the skies and music hear on earth,
Virgo and Capricorn, this day is your new birth,
Let us build a foundation which perfumes this place,
And let Virgo and Capricorn start a new and sexyer race;

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With Independence and love Installed and ready,
Antiperspirant with sweat and the smell of fresh baked bread,
Dripping with cream, The taste is yummy, yummy,
Virgo and Capricorn, on this day we shall both come,
Rub a tub, tub, there’s a Bun in her tum,
So now my lover let me lick you clean,
So your shaven pussy will gleam & gleam;

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Her Doors open wide and we beguine too jell,
Cream is refreshing as her belly starts too swell,
Virgo and Capricorn, A Man and his Wife,
Together for ever never never parted for life,
Once Joined by God they will start too explore,
Two body’s united now and for ever more;

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Virgo and Capricorn, this day is your new birth,
Let us build a foundation which perfumes our earth,
Sex is good for the souls of woman kind,
When there Orgasms cum flowing through there minds,
Liking and Sucking on a Peach spread wide open,
And only after she's cum, Can you begin the poking
In and out of her body your cock will spin,
Until for a seconed time in her head bells will ring;

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Her Ultimate dreams were slowly unfolding,
Masturbating her Vagina with his tongue will bring,
Trying to make her Explode into Giant orgasm of delight,
I want to see her Juices Running down the inside of her thighs,
And over my chin befor my royal blue eyes,
To hear her moaning as in an Orgasm she screams,
Biting her Nipples as her orgasms flow!
This is a thing only the best lovers know;

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Big or Little Boobs I love them all,
They belong to Orgasmic Women having a ball,
Cute little Madams are Sexy and Fun,
All getting Licked so there Orgasmic Explosions run,
Fucking Women so a  Babies seed is laid,
So Come on Babes  use your panties as Ankle Warmers,
And This Poet will make you all Cum,
With the Use of his Cock and the use of his Tongue.

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  • willdabeast
    February 18

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    strained

    first you should polish your word usage. you tend to use too many words in your transitions. or example, "I want to cleanse your body and refresh your soul,
    With hot creamy lotions so let us both rock-n-roll," would flow like a milkshake if you would crop it like so, "I want to cleanse your body, refresh your soul,
    Hot creamy lotions, let us rock-n-roll."

    in addition avoid the cheap puns/homonyms like hear in the third line of the first stanza.

    just a few suggestions for when you review your work.

    peace,
    ---wil


  • WhisperOcean
    February 18
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    I love reading anything from a zodiac nature. Interesteing write.

  • Aisades
    February 18

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    I read this because I'm a Capricorn, and one of my favorite signs is Virgo. But I am still not sure how I feel about this one.


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    February 18

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    A very interesting read. Enjoyed it. Although some lines I feel were a little throwed off, either could sound better adding or deleting a word. A wonderful read indeed...makes me say

    ahhhh.

    Best wishes to you hon

    Love
    Passions