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One night in Paradise

The exotic flowers, fill the room with rich perfumes..
The silk sheets, and smoothness of forever in his arms, delights me.
In his kingdom, hidden from the views of all man.
In the room where my innocence was gladly given,
To the man, who is now, and will always be my everything.
He has given me the moon and stars, in just one night of love.
Oh how could things get any better..



I woke to find him missing from my side.
That’s fine, some time to catch my breath.
I walk out to the balcony, facing the crystal ocean, the beauty is intoxicating.
I stare down at the waves hitting the rocks below. Breathtaking.


He wraps his arms around me from behind.. I smile, as he presses his lips to my neck.
“Was it everything you wanted, in this one night of paradise?”
I smiled, as his grip around my waist tightened ,
“It was all I dreamed it would be” I smiled…
“Good, I’m glad I made your last night……
A night to remember….”


I turned and gave him a look of confusion, as he lifted me..
Cradled me to his chest, and threw me off the balcony, into the crashing waves, and rocks, many miles below.
I hit them, head first.
As he watched….



I spent my one night in paradise, and now, I’ll spend the rest of my life, in my watery grave,
Away from the man, who was in love with money, and lusted for murder.
For he told me before we left the wedding guests…
“Are you ready, for your One night, in paradise."


I should have thought of how true his words, really were……

Author notes

A twist? Yeah that is what I was going for..

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  • SaraTalon
    March 26

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    I loved the imagery and the twist. It's easy to feel the narrators emotions, especially the confusion at the twist of events. You made it so easy to hate that murdering bastard.


  • Heroesrox
    March 1

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    Awesome write, hun! I really loved this and you have so much talent! keep up the great work!


  • ladyhelenaofsorrows
    February 22

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    As the previous comment said, this was just CAPTIVAING. I really liked it, and it's a style I don't usually read. The twist of it surprised me, well done! Thanks for entering, and I'm adding you to the finalists' list.
    -Lena


  • jayyniecakes.
    February 18
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    this is so suprising and interesting.. it really was quite captivating.

    :]

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