now its too late
i never knew that someone would lose a tear
in my memory and hold me so dear
why wasn’t i able to see this when i had a chance
i was too consume on looking behind
if i only knew then
i had no idea then that could heal my aching fear
but now its too long gone as my soul tries to find rest
but to all the memories of mine growing in time just like dust
all those who seem distant and apart
just sorrow and pain left in their heart
I never knew this is what is meant to depart
when blood flows from my wrist as the time went slow
i thought the answer will come out and in darkness it will glow
but then to my helpless and selfish deed
the sorrow i borrowed in my closed ones as a seed
i passed away leaving them in aching creed
Author notes
Killing yourself is not the answer... if its the pain u like try living life honestly
ghost of a suicidal person.
what you say?
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Im not much for these types of poems but you covered your subject fairly well
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It was really good and descriptive, an awesome poem that paints a picture and sets a mood for sure but im not sure if it fits the prompt to well cause' im not seeing any opinion here
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well then your missing the point of the poem dear... this whole poem itself is an opinion for not suiciding..this poem deal with the suicide concept in reverse psychology..
i choose not to insult them(the person who is suiciding) by not giving them names such as cowards but instead try to put light on the things that hid in their dark moments.. more reason to live for
neways thanks for you comment.. if you still think the poem misses the opinion then i guess i m in the wrong page.. would you please enlighten me then
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You've said it all. An excellent writ.
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tragic write. the nending worked well.
fully agree with the authors notes, its not an option and living true can be deadly. -
Caught suicidal person's point of view well...suicide can never be the answer....
As for constructive criticism, you might want to shorten thelines where you can and add a few punctuataions, atealst where there is a transit of time period.
eg
i thought the answer will come out and in darkness it will glow
into
i thought the answer will come and/to glow in darkness
hope you find this useful..ALl the best in the contest!
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hmm.. thanks for the comment.. yeah i do see some punctuation need i will check on it later.. but that line you said in the eg.. thats how i planed it to be..
if you reread those two lines carefully you will notice our point of view is different..
thanks a lot for your sweet applauds and your comment..
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tearful
it hurts
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this write is kinda inspired by u
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WOW
I can almost see a suicidal person. I
can relate to this poem
very well.
Good luc
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