I look into the mirror
And see a familiar face
A simple human being
Who understands my place
Treading the same exhausted paths
Day after day after day
My head down, taking whatever
Life chooses to throw my way
But inside there's something different
A feeling I cannot name
I feel it bubbling up inside
And nothing feels the same
A powerful feeling of difference
Tells me there's something more
A whisper that opportunity
Is knocking at my door
Give to me the answers I seek
The meanings I can't find
Help me make the most of life
Crammed into such a short time
Tell me please what I need to know
I beg you, hear my plea
Give me the final pieces
Help me find the missing key
Because inside there's something different
A feeling I cannot name
I feel it bubbling up inside
And nothing feels the same
A powerful feeling of difference
Tells me there's something more
A whisper that opportunity
Is knocking at my door
It's knocking at my door, yeah
The time to answer is now
It's knocking at my door, yeah
Someone please tell me now
Author notes
kinda sucks, I know. it needs a lot of work. inspired by the song "mirror" by dead season
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ok, mhmm...take this back to your heart, you've got a ton of stuff from mind which is wonderful but there is little soul and heart in it..pour your heart and soul into this! It's so good but it can be breathtaking
I hope all is well! Keep this talent of yours up! Your doin great,
Peace and Love
~J
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It doesn't "suck".
It was amazing and once I read your author notes I wanted to slap you silly for thinking that hun!
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Very nice! Always keep answering the knock!
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Awesome Write
The end is a little shaky but other than that the entire poem flows beautifully and i can picture myself sitting in the shoes of the person in the poem...
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i was trying to make it kinda like a song, but i've never been that good at writing lyrics...
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There is nothing wrong with this!
In fact its very good in my opinion. Written in an interesting way that keeps the reader hooked all the way through right up until the end. I really enjoyed reading it. Thanx 4 sharing it with the world.
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I like this, this definitely doesn't suck
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