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A Neighbor A Freind

As she was at school
There she was in the middle of the day
When she heard about a neighbor and a friend
They were not close
Her heart was torn apart
To me this was not cool
Not this way
To have life end
It is like a reality dose
It hit deeply in my heart
Everyone in school had be sad
It is hard to understand
Of life and how we leave
Sometimes we may even have fears
Of what could happen to us all
Life can end bad
Here on earth's land
But we must believe
With all of the crying tears
That he is remembered by all.

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Jan 27, mendy

A contest entry

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  • August Starlight silver member
    February 18
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    Awh, you definitely understood the prompt quite well. I especially love the last two lines. Thank you for entering.


  • peregrin
    February 18
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    This is great.
    I really like it,
    flows well...
    Touching write,
    Good luck in the contest.

    Gwen


  • August Starlight silver member
    February 18

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    Which date did you choose?
    I can't see your name, because I'm not a paid member, and I need the date so I can like.. read it properly.