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[ You told me you loved me ]

You told me you loved me
and you say it to her

You told me I was your everything,
and you say you'd die for her!

I guess I really
am nothing to you

I guess I know You never
really loved me

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  • Guerrero
    February 20
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    Aw. I totally love how this one had like you vs her. It was really good


  • Peach Fuzzz
    February 18

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    I am not sure where you were going with this....I can feel the emotion, the pain in the poem, but it seems there is more to be said. That is just my opinion. Let it all out honey! There is great potential here!