How can I describe to you
the loveliness of a tillandsia
in full blush, about to bloom?
I collect them as a hobby;
through trial and error I
have 7 out of 12 remaining -
Just having bought two red
beauties: a brachycaulos green
in flushing red - what a beauty!
To simplify things, I've named
her Andromeda, and nestled her
in my hoya by my desk...
I can't wait for her to bloom.
There's also the less spectacular
Iontha Rubra or Mexican Red -
A tiny little fireball I call Ruby.
But not to forget my amethyst
Aeranthos, Ming Toy, which sits
In my hoya's pot as well, next to
Andromeda; at first I was taken
with Ming Toy, but Andromeda -
She's beautiful, like a maiden about
to achieve womanhood, the colors
are SO fantastic and brilliant.
Yet not everybody is a botanist at
heart; not everybody understands...
My father does, collecting orchids,
Raising them here in the state of
Washington - that a trick in itself.
And my mother, well, she smiles,
Having lived with my father for about
30 years, knowing his passion for orchids,
she tolerates my growing passion as well.
I dragged that poor woman, recovering
from a kidney infection as she was,
through an indoor nursery to buy my beauties;
She urged me on, to go and look at
what new shipment had arrived of
tillandsias because she knows I love them;
She feels she doesn't see me happy enough
in life, so she sacrificed her time to rest
after being so ill before returning at work.
So I wonder: which is the greater beauty: my
lovely Andromeda, about to bloom, or my mother
who's love is self-sacrificing for her daughter's happiness?
Author notes
You can't see in the pic very well, but the brachycaulos green in blush is half brillant red, half green - green at the bottom.
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A contest entry
- Anything and Everything! [Prewrites Allowed] by Captain Amber SL.
700 points, ended April 26, 73 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - About Something Red by Kiddy.
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Comments
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WOW. It’s so beautiful. The picture says it all. The plant is a real beauty. No wonder I loved it and took inspiration from the same to pen something brilliant. That’s really cool. Thanks for entering.
My Score
How Red it was – 9.95/10
Diction – 9.3/10 –
Theme – 10/10
Presentation – 9/10
Creativity – 9.25/10
Total – 47.5/50
Very Good Good score!! All the best in the contest!!!
Love and regards
Kiddy
Will be expecting your lovely participation in my next contests too. Thanks for your valuable time.
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I really loved this piece, and how the plants were described as beauties and people. It really gave the emotional touch, and the ending was beautiful, I loved it. The whole poem was filled with imagery and poetic devices, and it's an amazing poem.
One suggestion I would make, though, is to vary the words in the third stanza; the repetition of the words "beauty" and "red" threw me a little. Perhaps you could rewrite it as something similar to this:
Just having bought two scarlet
miracles: a brachycaulos green
in flushing red - what a beauty!
I wish you the best of luck, and keep writing and improving your poetry. ^__^
Aeris Silverlight
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I love this penning... I reminded me of a few poems, movies, and plays I've read.
""So I wonder: which is the greater beauty: my
lovely Andromeda, about to bloom, or my mother
who's love is self-sacrificing for her daughter's happiness?""
I really enjoyed this stanza.. the imagery and emotion just jump out at me.. well done poet!! -
Very interesting write, I like it! The imagery is strong and the message clearly expressed. Thanks for entering!
-Lena -
I love growing plants. . . 7/12 you say? My track record is worse . . . and I work on my grandmother's roses, too.
What a lovely write to fall into this morning. Lovely imagery, great flow, and a touch of humour
God bless,
Zach -
this is pretty cool...Hobbies are fun...
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very well written poem. it flowed well and i learned new words from this piece yay me lol
keep writing
-deadly -
i give you props for growing plants...personally, i have managed to kill a cactus so, anything has got to be better than me...and i come from a family of gardeners...we love plants, i just kill them...best luck! (great write!)
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Very beautiful
i like ur wordz and imagery
i 2 like plants
but unfortunatly they carry on rotting
Spark
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A Beautiful write, I think they are both wonderful, The tillandsia does have some beautiful colorings, You are a lucky woman to have a Mother like that! I can honestly see one my children doing something like this. A beautiful piece of work here!
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Very beautiful poem and also a very beautiful flower. I love the color of the tillandsia. Especially the one in the photo. Great write.
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