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Innocent Water Wings

As I look into this lake,
I fade into the days
That seen better;
As my heart quivers, shakes
Wandering. Wading.
In yellow water wings.
I smile contently.

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  • KyleBerg gold member
    February 19

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    A very cute piece.

    Just wondering.. did you mean "seem" instead of "seen" in line 3 ? Also, the background (although beautiful) makes for slightly tricky reading..

    I loved the alliteration towards the end... makes it flow very gently.. kinda like the water in a lake =)

    Thank you for this entry


  • L.Jay
    February 18
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    cute!