Her, on top of him...
His hands resting on her backside
Which slowly begin to go higher and higher
Until up her shirt.
She was wearing her favorite tank top.
She has no idea what she's doing, but still...
Is trying to keep up with him.
She feels naked although she's clothed
Almost like she's naked on the inside.
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=( an expirience i'd rather not talk about.
Whatcha think?
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This is an interesting poem with an interesting concept.
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Great job showing some raw emotions here. I loved it, and could imagine everything in my head as I read it. The imagery is amazing, but I'm sorry about this experience you'd wish not to talk about. Hope things get better, && Great Write!
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Thank you your comment meant alot to me :]
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There's a small problem with syntax in the first stanza, as if 'her backside' is the subject of 'begin to go higher and higher'.
Apart from that, you've captured the moment of being torn between feeling, and knowing somehow this is wrong.
'naked on the inside' is a great way of expressing this. -
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oh, i didn't notice that mistake
im going to fix that now, thank you (:
i'm glad you liked it
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