In the heart
lie your selfish secrets, fructifying their race.
Burning embers fan the devouring flame;
Engulfed in pain, this brutal love imparts.
In the soul
resides a desperate aching in need of bitter control.
A foolish longing arises for his gentle bruising kiss.
Do you sorely miss my hand to crushingly hold?
In the night,
insensitive to right or wrong, you strike.
Sensual dreams, a sweet raping embrace,
can't replace the lover’s [my] blind sight.
In the end
forlorn dreams are scattered on the pulsating wind.
Oh Lord, heal not my wounded, abused heart;
This waging war, perpetually fed, will asphyxiate.
Author notes
S a m a n t h a M a r i e
A contest entry
- fight back by Haley-baby1.
550 points, ended February 18, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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absolutley amazing. it shows such a great depth of feeling. and some say an unusual sexual need. I love it. keep it up.
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The way you've set this up is effective, with those short lines at the beginning of each stanza. Dreams scattered on the wind - so sad, hopeless in fact.
Enjoyed your write.
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Wow...All I have gotten was emotional scarring and mental manipulation but even then this poem makes it like a walk in the park. Its wonderful. I can actually pull from the poem the emotional and physical but also dark pleasure that some would find sick. This is perfec!!!!!!
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Why thank you
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It is sad when I see someone who lets the one they love abuse them like this. I don't think it is right by any means. Still, this poem held some poetic merit. Excellent write and good luck in my contest.
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The structual pattern is perfect, and the writing is well done.
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"devouring flames", I love it. XD Good luck.
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very relateable, and heart breaking. so many girls let this happen. i dont know why we do it. A form of self-abuse? I can't wait for you to read this book. It is being written, for girls just like us.
goodluck.
hang tight
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desperate aching, bruising kiss, to crushingly hold, sorely miss, raping embrace, wounded, abused heart.
All of these words were well thought out, fitting with your theme and extremely powerful. well done. this is the first entry i have read in this contest and I am already putting you as a finalist. Emmy -
This isn't the only write I've read of yours, which for me expresses a deep and weighty heart ache. A hunger and searching going on deeper underneath it all.
This makes me want to see something else break through the surface... like a fountain which finds some weightlessness.
Sure hope I'm around when this happens... which is where I believe all this is heading.
Sol
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Thank you Sol
Perhaps something will break through...
I think it might almost be out.
It tried with the last poem I wrote.
But not quite yet....
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i'm in love with this. i felt this.
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This is deep, very emotional. i dig it bby guurl
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Thanks love
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