I wish to say something to you tonight
In your arms everything seems so right
Sweetheart,let me whisper to you under the moonlight
Thank you my love for making me whole,
For giving me dreams I will always adore
For helping me pick up the broken pieces of my life
You helped me overcome the pain and strife
For holding my hands in every hour of pain
For catching me when I fell and never complain
For helping me to see when I was blind
For guiding my way home before the wind
You helped me to breathe when I could not
Keeping me from falling apart when I was distraught
I was drowning in my ocean of pains
My fear enslaving me in chains
Your love helped me walk again when I was lame
Like a guardian angel,into my life you came
You opened the skies for me and gave me wings to fly
You built me in love,a fact I can't deny
Every word I say is true
Tonight I give my entirety to you
I wish to say something to you tonight
In your arms everything seems so right
Sweetheart,let me whisper to you under the moonlight
Thank you my love for making me whole,
For giving me dreams I will always adore
"THANK YOU FOR LOVING ME "
20th "February" 2009
© 2006-2009 Rinzu Susan Rajan
Author notes
INSPIRED BY THE SONG "THANK YOU FOR LOVING ME" BY BON JOVI
A contest entry
- Song you can relate too by DeathlyAngel.
400 points, ended March 14, 14 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - contest time by Guerrero.
700 points, ended March 26, 5 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Good song to be inspired by I really like this thanks for entering and Good luck
♪ -♥Amy♥
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good
well I have to say your poem was good, well written, and well put. I am glad to see you followed my instructions for the prompt, but in my opinion it lacks a wow factor, a true realization, something that emphasizes your point, and what the song is really saying. I don't mean to be to critical, and I hope you don't see it to be that way, but I just dont feel your poem. Maybe because I myself can't relate to it. But either way a good write.
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Bravo !!
A most lovely & brilliantly glowing poem !
Beautifully expressed , pleasing and graceful
in it's flow ..
Best wishes !! Friend Easy
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wooooooow.. great write.. keep it up..i love the way it flows
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This is a very good piece. I like the way it flows. Very nice keep up the great job.
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this is very sweet. i like the form and spacing. thank you for sharing and good luck
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I absoutely loved it
this wasw really good keep on wriing and yea love is always complicated I wish it was easier.
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Thank you my love for making me whole,
For giving me dreams I will always adore
You sound sooo thankful and Im pleased you have experienced the gratitude which you portray in this poem. Thank you for entering this into my contest and i hope you do welll.
Emma -
beautiful poem !
you know wht this poem has all those beautiful ingredients which only an Indian heart can have . surnder,worship, sacrifice... poem is full of that divine emotion which we call love.
beautiful work , keep writtig dear. -
Awwwww
awwww this is sooo sweet. I can relate to this too.
Great job
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