on our first night together…
we watched a flurry of stars
and as we held tight
to each other
one of them, started to fall
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simple pleasures
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Love this. So sweet and romantic. Wish my everyday pleasuers were like this.
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Aww now that is very concrete and symbolic. I love that.
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sometimes the most ordinary things are just extraordinary. i liked it.
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this is lovely, reminds me a little of a haiku, the title is great, brings more depth to the story. excellent short write.
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One of the most beautiful things to remember...and how well you painted the falling star and that falling, reeling feeling.
~ Nicolette
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awww so sweet. I like to watch them fall while i lay in the grass and make wishes on them.
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VERY romantic, well written poet.
All the best,
mj.
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thanks poet!
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maybe because you made his wish come true (:
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i loved her while it lasted...so long ago
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