I am in love with sin.
sin has a body of a god-man
and words of a gospel singer
the hands of a god.
This sin taste so sweet
with every touch of my
body. and every drip of his
sweat that drops on my skin
How sin be so wonderful but
deadly at the same-time of the
sinning.
O this sin was wonderful
and hot, wet, steamy and
closed.
The heavens opened up and
song a song for the angels to
hear and for the devils to feel
the heat from the underworld.
This sin is the sin of sins
and the passion of the sin
only make me week to the knees
and make my heart melt with pleasure
i am in love with a sin a sin that is
heaven to me
Author notes
have you ever sin before and it feilt wonderful exspicaly when the sin is between the sheets
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in love with sin
Comments
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Very sensual good writte made me think awesome take on the prompt good luck on the contest
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That's why we continue to sin, we know it's not good for us; but it feel so dang good. Well displayed of such sinful addiction.
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A Human Heaven
I loved the first two verses especially . And I thought the ending was perfect . The third and the
fifth verses departed from the others I thought . I
felt the steamy wetness of the piece . I might consider removing the two parts I mentioned or
try to focus them more on the act itself . Sort of
like the others . The title was perfect , as were the
first and last lines . In the fifth verse , I would definitely remove "and song a song."In the sixth
verse I would change both the "make" words to
"made." If the author could think of or describe
other specific details of the sin . Using lips or other
parts or functions of the human form , that would
only enhance the Heavenly aspects of the human
sin . Overall , a very enjoyable read indeed . A
human sensual treasure .
Greenwolfe 1962
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Amazing. This is very well written
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This is very sensual... and other than a few misspelled words here and there I could not even think about changing a word of it. Great write. Thanks for sharing this with us.
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i am in love with a sin a sin that is
heaven to me
I loved that part. Just a fabulous write with GREAT imagery.
Wishing You Many Blessings,
Robert
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A curius word choice and immages are very thought provoking ..love the message behind the words..well done..and well thought as well...
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Nicely done.
Good visuals & sensuality expressed.
Great abundance of thoughts incorporate within
Thanks for sharing & best of luck -
GOOD LINES OF EROTICA
COOL WRITE GOOD EROTIC VERSE
How sin be so wonderful but
deadly at the same-time of the
sinning.
O this sin was wonderful
and hot, wet, steamy and
closed.
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