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~Melting In Love~

I once caught sunlight stretch its arms
To steal crimson hues from a garden of roses.
The other time, I caught it stealing the greenery of forests.
Once, I woke up even before dawn
Only to find the first sunray steal moonshine.
Now, I am pretty much sure…
Where the white of snow goes when it melts!
But why does it melt at all?

Sunlight stretches its arms to embrace
The snow dressed up in bridal white.
The snow surrenders to the warmth
Of love, that eventually transports the former
Onto an ethereal dancing floor
So that it may dance with rapture
In the floodlight of soulful ecstasy
To celebrate the moment of
Its spiritual awakening...

So now, you even know
~Why the white of snow goes when it melts~

It’s not about snow. It’s about love.

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  • storiesuntold gold member
    August 16

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    Truly an awesome write here

    This one you should send the link to Puppydog he would love this poem for he writes of such things himself and he uses his own photograhps to show


  • Sandygram silver member
    March 21

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    A beautiful poem with lovely imagery. A delight to read this morning. You take care, Sandy


  • Puppydog gold member
    March 7

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    BEAUTIFUL!!!!

    Nature indeed shows the whole world its love, its vibrant colors, it's variety. 's


  • Nicolette gold member
    February 28

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    Some lovely visuals here and a wonderful spiritual quality about it. I very much liked the idea of "love transports the former" - it's always there, just in a different form and shape - and yes, it renews the giver.

    I would delete the last two lines as I think the first 2 stanzas shows us where snow/love goes, but that is just my opinion . All in all, I think you know where it goes!

    Thank you for sharing your thoughts this way, Sophie!

    ~ Nicolette

    • SabaSophiya
      February 28
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      A Note of Thanks...

      Thanks Nicolette! Thanks for your sincere feedback on my work! I feel your opinion regarding the last two lines is worth considering. I do plan to revise this poem some day.

      Walk in peace,
      Sophie.


  • Uniquely-Scarred
    February 19
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    SOME LOVELY IMAGERY AND SOMETHING TO PONDER, I ENJOYED THE READ, BEST OF LUCK IN THE CONTEST


  • Blue30
    February 19

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    This poem has great imagry and nice flow. Your wording parallels the emotions behind it. It evokes feelings of contentment for the reader.


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    February 19
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    Lovely diction here, so lovely.

    All the best,

    mj.


  • Filtered Dreams
    February 18
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    Amazing Poem. I loved it


  • WretchedLove
    February 18

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    Beautiful. And the title caught my eye. Great write. Wonderful flow. It has a peaceful feel to it...


  • SanitZdFreedom
    February 18

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    Nicely done!

    Fabulous! I love it, perfect!
    ~Sunlight stretches its arms to embrace
    The snow dressed up in bridal white.
    The snow surrenders to the warmth
    Of love, that eventually transports the former
    Onto an ethereal dancing floor
    So that it may dance with rapture
    In the floodlight of soulful ecstasy
    To celebrate the moment of
    Its spiritual awakening...


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    February 18

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    I once caught sunlight stretch its arms

    i kind of stumbled on this line but the rest of it flowed easily for me to read. thank you for sharing this with me today and i wish you the best of luck in this contest that you have entered. looking forward to reading more from you in the near future. viyanna rosemarie


  • Treasure 5 gold member
    February 18

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    wow

    This is a wonderful poem all about love. Love is awsome to have, longs you finf the right one. I found my true love. This poem was a pleasure to read.

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