It hit her like a heart attack
It took her all; gave nothing back
An evil face with an evil grin
Not going to let her dare to win
Her tear streak faced of every lie
The thoughts to want to say goodbye
The pain and failure of it all
The want to crawl into ball
The promises that never last
No single good thought of the past
Can't ever let the wall go down
Just brings about another frown
Her thoughts of sweet retribution
Her hopes have gone through execution
No one can hurt her anymore
She's not the same girl as before
No longer innocent and pure
The world has made her life obscure
You can't be nice and oh so meek
Because life weeds out the weak
This girl was meant for so much more
Yet she feels like life is just a war
A never ending battle of soul wrenching pain
There is nothing left to keep her sane
She tries again to let you in
Yet you fill her life with so much sin
No wonder why that faithful day when;
She found herself lost and never seen again
All advice/comments loved always.
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like lyrics
really good! putting it in the 3rd person almost makes it sound like you are telling part of a story. this sounds like it could be a really good song. i especially like the line "this girl was meant for so much more"... powerful stuff and i can empathize... -
Wonderful!
this has a good flow. Its rich in meaning. I lyk the line that says "you cant be nice and oh so meek, Because life weeds out the weak" great job! -
By Charles in 6th period
its good i love it it makes me feel your pain. michelle is a douche bag i love you!! maybe i should make an account so i can stop typing on neecees. your poem had great imagery and was very original thank you for sharing with me.
~Charles Fritz
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