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Every Friday On Rt. 100

 

 

 

My brother and I
would laugh so hard
our stomachs would hurt

and we couldn't down
another bite.


Nana would tell us silly stories

about poppop Don

and our new adopted grandfather

would chime in

with the weirdest comments

'an orgy is like a sandwich'

Nana rolled her eyes
and as serious as we tried to be
at twelve and fourteen

we would bust!

it was like family,
every week, a reunion 

even the cashiers and cooks 

knew us by name  

but times change,

 

Nana retired to Florida

my brother and I,

are all grown up, 

and the place has been taken over

by a bunch of roudy teenager

that call each other fags

 

and among the empty booths, 

I sit solo,
with my one hotdog
everything 
extra sauce.

 

 

 

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  • Cup-a-Joe
    September 1

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    You can tell a story like no one else. I wanted to visit that place so bad, and then at the end you are eating a hot dog. I want one with everything. lol Thanks for taking me there with you

    Joe

  • imkleyurflesh
    August 18

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    Nothing like a comment out of the blue, aye? lol

    I've read several of your poems, and I like them. They have a feel of
    real to them, as does this one. You write clearly and with vigor.

    I noticed the word 'rowdy' springing out of this poem. You would have
    caught that on one of your revisions, I'd have bet, but I am running out of
    things to say.

    I would guess any revision would include only an addition
    of more stanzas, rather than any rewrite of what you have here.

    Thanks for a nice read on this grey and humid day,

    ~kley


  • estbelle gold member
    March 1

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    exceptional writing

    ahh...I love the title of your poems, they are very original. I love how the story flowed. I learn some sandwich lesson 101.


  • Terry Collett
    February 26
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    Excellent.

    I can read this and want to know more and that is a good sign of a good writer.


  • Ken-Maverick
    February 25

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    'an orgy is like a sandwich'
    hahahahahaha
    That line alone made you onto my favorites list
    Brilliant piece

    Ken


    • Catie Sheeran gold member
      February 25
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      so I can't take all the credit for that line...that's my grandfather...lol

    • Catie Sheeran gold member
      February 25
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      I had to put that line in...my grandfather still tells us that he's getting kinda old...lol my friends that have met him think he's hilarious.


  • bobanonymous gold member
    February 21
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    Nicely done

  • Wisdom 1
    February 19

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    this is really nice

    though it sounds informal it's still vry thought provocking. every one share similarly happy moments. hence you ae not odd. keep penning poet.


  • usefuldistraction
    February 18

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    Such an enjoyable read Catie, another ppiece of you posted, the love the history lesson, and love the view! Great writing.


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    February 18

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    Oh, I adore this! You have such a powerful intrinsic writing style here.

    Wonderful piece my dear.

    All the best,

    mj.

  • tara wilson gold member
    February 18

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    wonderful Catie...LOL...the orgy part was unexpected...i love how you write memories.


  • Swangrnv gold member
    February 18

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    aaahhh..

    you clever clever woman!! l.o.l. wow, i admit my mind was completely in the gutter expecting the expected, but damn this wasn't expected, and the joy that gave me was well...unexpected!!

    • Catie Sheeran gold member
      February 18
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      ha ha! I knew I would sucker you in... ...sorry, had to do it hey, sometimes you gotta do things you don't really want to do...or your not too proud of to get yourself out there...to get people to read your poetry...lol

      he he


  • Thomas Scott gold member
    February 18
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    Luvit!

    Yer on a roll, baby!
    More, more, more.


  • Whyitt U
    February 18

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    What a great memory...I knew a place like this, the 1806, I never learned of orgies there...but I learned plenty. It burnt down a short while ago...it's kinda sad how most memories can't be revisited in real life, with the same lasting effect from the actual memory. That's why memories are so cherished, I guess. Thanks for sharing!

    wyattxxx

    • Catie Sheeran gold member
      February 18
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      thank you

      that is so sad that 1806 burnt down...I would be so sad...this place is a hotdog place called yoccos. you might know it...it's a chain..but not too many of them out there. anyway...I would be soo sad if it every burnt down or got torn down.


  • charcoal
    February 18

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    oh so that's what an orgy is!
    my grandfather forgot to educate me

    this is good poetry. took me there and i could imagine the red faux leather seats ( at least that's how they look in my head) , the food loaded with butter...

    the ending... yeah it works.

    everything
    extra sauce


    not a boring predictable ending. it has spice (:

    this is the kind of poetry i like. you do memories so well.


  • Nicolette gold member
    February 18

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    I agree with Chez. A lovely memory and I like how you're bringing food into your poetry, Catie . Somebody once said we don't miss the town or the house where we grew up, but our childhoods. I could so identify with this one.

    ~ Nicolette


  • Cannonsfire
    February 18

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    It's a wonderful memory..the only thing I'd takeout is in the first part 'so bad' it' snot necessary there. The image is strong with 'stomachs hurt' Liked it C

    • Catie Sheeran gold member
      February 18
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      I kept reading your comment over and over...because I was wondering why you would say..take out the first part 'so bad' it's snot isn't necessary there. LMAO! I was wondering why you would call those two words in my poem, 'snot' !!! No matter how many times I read it..I still read it the same way...

      thought maybe you were trying to be creative with your comment...lol

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