Where lemon drop wishes
blow candy cane kisses;
over cumulus
where your
neighbors
sleep.
The ladder you climb
will go higher each time
Tho the apples
will seem
out of
reach.
dawn fades
to horizontal
beacon
like your eyes
shutting out
the world.
Author notes
option 1 or A.. the first one.
A contest entry
- ...I Wanna Get Away... by Desire.
1221 points, ended March 14, 2009, 6 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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well much like i said in the comment
that i wrote before...
no photo needed to know this is an
awesome poem. i loved it, ending was stunning -
Thank You!!
Thank You for Your entry: Horizontal Beacon
This piece tugged hard at Spirit and after reading several times ~ I'm Honored also Humbled You took the time to pen for my contest
You took the prompt and ran with it~ Bravo!!
When I digest words written, images come through that grab hard~
Woven Strengths: for some reason kept seeing a pillow- fluffed and a Seraphim summoning- like wanting You to come - as if to show You
something~ also being shown a clay pot- looks like a piece of pottery but seems like it is holding Sacred belongings - as if ashes...
Love the words: lemon drop wishes- Hopefully this makes sense Powerful verse and message You have brought forth
These words grabbed and pulled~
dawn fades to horizontal beacon
like your eyes shutting out the world
Vivid Imagery poured in these lines...
Thank You for sharing Your Heart also Voice
also best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
**Judging will be done shortly...
Many blessings too
with much love and light~ Desire~*~
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And there was rhyme!
Excellent word choice here penned a creatively imaged piece that saw me dancing on cotton candy clouds (that's mine
)
If we can only close our eyes and make life what we dream about...
Best to you in the contest
Shari
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no photo needed to know this is an awesome poem. I love it.
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captured the photo well I think
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