Death's Valentine

Ribbons
     woven like asps
          seduced skin

nipping
     veins, tearing
          burrowing in

pain
     unfurled inside
          hinting "I'm alive"

mocking,
     he pushed me
          like trash... aside

then
     my fingers...

gouged
     his eyes

Author notes

Prompt: Picture Prompt (30 words)

Prompt: http://i207.photobucket.com/albums/bb104/Beloved_Darkness/Passion.jpg

A contest entry

30/10/30 by wildflower.. 575 points, ended February 18, 2009, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest

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chilali
March 1, 2009

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I love the picture. She is sooo prettyyy! Hehe. And the poem. Nice and dark. I loved it!
luvdrkchocolate
February 19, 2009

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Wow. This is really a very dark write for you. Are you feeling ok? I never got all that into Valentine's and all that. I don't think you should just show your love for someone on one day out of the year. If you're really in love and want to stay that way, you need to appreciate them in little ways all the time! I thought your poem was very expressive though and I liked your choice of images. I found it to be effective.
Dragonbabyx3
February 18, 2009

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eckkk remind me never to come across you in a deserted alleyway ok! hehe A great sinister write! Loved it!!!!
Nom de Plume
February 18, 2009
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isnt revenge a dish best served cold ?? lol nice write, wish you luck
jcat
February 17, 2009

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Funny...we both had references to garbage!!! This was incredibly gorgeous....So dark and sinister!! Flawless beauty.....Best wishes!
wildflower.
February 17, 2009
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oooh nicely written.
I love the darkness in this piece.
it screams volumes!