you are my sunshine.
my only own sunshine.
you shine the brightest I've ever seen.
i almost don't believe.
you make me happy.
when skies are gray.
when the clouds cover up.
and everyone else goes away.
you'll never know dear,
how much i love you.
you never asked,
or wanted to see.
so please don't take my sunshine away.
and maybe you'll find how much we mean.
Author notes
used to sing this when i was little.
the real version anyways.
which is
"you are my sunshine, my only sunshine, you make me happy when skies are gray,
you'll never know dear, how much i love you, so please don't take my sunshine away"
(in case you''ve never heard it.)
A contest entry
- Your Favorite Nursery Rhyme by Tqop.
650 points, ended February 27, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
thoughts?
Comments
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This is really nice. I love the metaphores. It is really sweet. I like the emotion in it.
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thanks so much for the comment. i actually had a pretty crappy day today,
and forgot that i wrote this,
so rereading it and seeing your comment made me smile too lol.
it's contagious.
thanx again!
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Excellent!
Very nice.
I love it.
This is really good.
It makes me feel warm and good inside.
It makes me think of flowers, and tulips.
And sunsets.
So slam dunked that poem.
You did excellent.
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