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Moonlight's Children

The night when moonlight's children dance,
In echoes of lunar romance,
Resound within violin strings,
As Earth shimmers like angel's wings.

Await the touch of light, by chance,
The night when moonlight's children dance,
Beyond the realms of worldly kings,
The breath of life new season brings.

Vernal delight where winter clings,
Golden daffodil softly sings,
The night when moonlight's children dance,
Creeping breaths of first light enhance.

Farewells to bitter frosty stings,
As warmer days the springtide brings,
Season of the Goddess advance,
The night when moonlight's children dance.

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  • Tricia Mits
    November 24
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    Very pretty!

    I like this poem, especially when the "golden daffodil softly sings." This entire stanza seems to be whispering...


  • Ellis gold member
    August 5

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    Because of the end-line-rhyming words, "sings, wings, and brings," of your poem's verses -- and the middle four lines in mine, this strongly reminds me of my First Love Poem: Purple Blue

    Beautiful girl in purple blue
    I lift my eyes and turn to you.
    My heart goes up up; heaven sings.
    God is love; and it's love God brings.
    Down down from Heaven on angel's wings
    Come warmth and joy as my heart sings!
    I lift my eyes and turn to you
    Beautiful girl in purple blue.


    • Ceridwens Soul silver member
      August 6
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      Purple blue...

      now that just sounds georgeous, I love blue, adding a touch of purple would make it so rich and almost luxurious if a colour shade can be described like that.


      • Ellis gold member
        August 29
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        I got the idea for that color from Wallace Stevens' THE MAN WITH THE BLUE GUITAR.


  • Coathanger
    July 20
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    Captivating and enchanting.


  • ajocean silver member
    July 1
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    keep it coming i like it alot


  • -Ang-
    May 5
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    wow!

    ANG


  • MorbidGarden
    April 8

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    wonderful! very beautiful...another soul kindred to the moon, merry met and blessed be, my lunar sister...great job with this...i've yet to find something that you've written that's bad...EVERYTHING YOU WRITE ROCKS!!


  • individuality gold member
    March 23

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    a soft and gentle rolling piece of form poetry, flowers and smiles under moonlight, tender breaths floating around the poem as time moves away from winter.


  • Patpowers silver member
    March 15
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    Nice tribute to the spring season Jem! Wonderful,visual work of poetry. THANKS AGAIN!


  • maralisa silver member
    February 18
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    a wonderful poem I loved your imagery and depth throughout thank you for sharingmaralisa

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