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HAIKU 185 - Marconi

thank you Marconi
soft strains of music wake me
to a bright new day

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  • Arkbear gold member
    February 17, 2009
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    Hello

     

    Using Fillers ( are, like, the, and, is, of, that, to, ) in a KU' is not something I suggest -

     

    This is without Fillers..>>>

     

     

     

    thank you Marconi

    soft musical strains wake me

    ahh, a bright new day

     

     

    Just a suggestion of what I look for

     

                ....thank you for entering...God bless you!

     

    Bear ~


    • Shenton silver member
      February 17, 2009
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      Bear

      Thankyou for your suggestion and your blessing; both are very much appreciated.
      Best wishes
      Shenton