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Dry Land is All War

 

 

Keep my face clear

    so I dump out

 this ocean of love

 

I drown in daily-

 

  I'm sure someone else wants to drown, too.

No one enjoys living

                                  anymore.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Katilina
    March 19

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    wow

    I love how short poems can bring out powerful emotion, and this is a great example. Your poem is very powerful, it leave the reader feeling hopeless and said inside. Your words are impactful. Pen on.


  • Oh.My.Juliet
    March 11
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    Wow, I really love this! Great work!