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Death Shroud Hidden

colored autumn leaves
camouflage natures headstone
quicksands open grave


 

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  • Ann45 gold member
    February 19
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    direct and more so, when you living the death grasp


  • Arkbear gold member
    February 17

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    Hello Bill -

     

    Not bad....too many spaces after *autumn* -

     

    A tad left out on how quicksands relate to rest of write....let me know before contest ends

     

    Bear ~


    • BluesMan gold member
      February 17
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      Hey Bear I fixed the extra space. As for the rest of your inquiry The title was missing one word.

      The death shroud is the quicksand itself. Once you sink below the surface, the surface becomes the shroud The word hidden is directed towards the leaves
      Sorry for the confusion
      Bill

  • poets whisper silver member
    February 17
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    nice job. Very visual


  • hyper thing
    February 17
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    wow this is damn good

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