the pineapple top
took root on grounded prairie
to become a tree
Author notes
5-7-5 syllable count.
A contest entry
- Poetry Formed XLIII - by Bear by Arkbear.
550 points, ended February 19, 2009, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Reader interpretation and critical comment welcomed
Comments
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Interesting.
This makes for a very interesting haiku. I know many plants that you think would only be for certain things can turn into something else.
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Nice work!
Very lovely.
It sounds nice.
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i must say these poems to me are strange i never quite got them and never dared to try myself but to say something good i love pineapple
abigail
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This haiku reminded me of this quote -
“He is the very pineapple of politeness!”
- Richard Brinsley Sheridan
You really get a zen moment if you compare that quote with your haiku.
I see this haiku and view it in many ways.
I encourage you to keep on working with the haikus because not a lot of people can do them and I enjoy reading them when they pop up.
Kari
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i've always found these kinds of poems to have so much meaning, and when there are so little words to it. i like this one a lot. well done :]
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Forgot these...lol.
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I really liked this. I do agree with the usage of fillers, but sometimes, it looks better. lol. Thanks for sharing!
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Hello
Using Fillers ( are, like, the, and, is, of, that, to, ) in a KU' is not something I suggest...
the pineapple top
took root on grounded prairie
to become a treeOr
pineapple top took
root on grounded praire soil
a tree sprouts upward
...just my suggestion
Thank you for entering....God bless,
Bear ~
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True, but then it would not look at all like the pineapple I was looking at when I wrote it But food for thought with future haikus Gosh all this pineapple talk is making me hungry
Thanks for the feedback and the inspiration. -
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