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Violet Moodswing

Verily amid the
Indigenous trappings of the
Over abundance of
Lace and leering,
Emotion sets its own spiral
Trapped to snap and spin.

Mundane or musing in
Olive or glorious grapes
Of wrath to writhing, the
Drapes are pulled and
Swept aside to
Will the light of day
Into not so darkness.
Neutralize the speculation and
Gladness returns.

Author notes

The prompt was violet. How could I resist

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  • DesolatELifE
    February 24, 2009

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    Tell me, is violet light or dark, or not? I like the shade of purple that is this background, I hope that's violet, because then my favourite[ish] colour will get a name.

    As for the poem, 'Into not so darkness.' is mt favourite piece.
    I am not keen on free verse type things yet, but, believe me, I'm trying =)


  • hearts blossoms
    February 19, 2009

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    gladness returns
    so true of a poet though the flaws lie within you they are never tarnished or set out in bold and the violet in us all is so merrily described here, cheeky, open and yet so deep for a moments look into your mind
    abigail


  • dustookie2
    February 19, 2009

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    The Purple rules all colours

    An acrostic well with your namesake colour but of course... Nice imagery you have painted alluring in 'lace and leering' exposing some of you within the lines an snap shot perhaps. Very nicely penned. Good luck in the contest. for the return of gladness


  • Gypsy Via Orleans
    February 18, 2009

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    how could you resist? "will the light of day into not so darkness" loved it. i wouldn't even know where or how to begin doing this with my name. this was great.


  • drifting cloud silver member
    February 18, 2009
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    Lots of feeling in this poem. I like 'Trapped to snap and spin'. We all feel this way at times.


  • Immortal Obscurity Greeters member
    February 17, 2009

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    Though we've never met before, I feel like I've invaded your mind on a very personal level after reading this. How appropriate that you use the prompt this way

    Well done & best of luck to you!


  • maybetheonion
    February 17, 2009

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    Great word choice. (:
    Neutralize the speculation and
    Gladness returns.
    I liked.
    Thanks for the entry!

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