Free Falling,
fast into a frivolous fire of desire.
Seeing sanctimonious souls
seeking simple solutions to aspire, that take them higher.
Unfortunately unable
to understand unless they're a mess.
Living lies,
to look like they fear less with success.
Constantly crying,
while creating chaos to camouflage confusion within their delusion.
Inconspicuously inundated
by an insecure insignificant illusion spawned by their seclusion.
Obviously overlooking,
their ostentatious oceans fueled by their emotions.
Virtuously vanquishing,
their values and devotions, surendering their notions.
Brilliantly broadcasting
their beliefs by blissfully breaking and taking.
Always allowing
their atrocious animosity to leave them aching but forsaking.
Diligently destroying
their destiny by deliberately dealing and stealing.
Plastic people
their pale pretentious disguise is peeling and unsealing.
Author notes
this one implies many things and has various meanings. Share your interpretations.
Do you feel like you are the only one that believes what you believe?
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I normally dont read poetry that uses huge words because I'm a simple kind of gal that thinks poetry should just be simple. But this well dooone! I like it. I shall leave it at that for lack of time to go really into it.
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well...let me see... how do i explain what only you could explain well enough?... maybe some feeling so sorry for themselves that they drown in the sorrows instead of finding solutions and maybe even the beauty they are missing... i don't know... i guess i could be way off ... but great poem!
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Obviously overlooking,
their ostentatious oceans fueled by their emotions.
Virtuously vanquishing,
their values and devotions, surendering their notions.
This is bit is bloody amazing, I like it a lot. The way you make use of rhyme is very traditional and by the book in a very commendable way- the words you rhyme together have similar meanings. This adds a good deal of cohesion to your work. Also, the internal rhyme within individual sentences is very good- works really well.
The form you made use of is interesting, too.
Great write- I enjoyed this a lot!
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I really like this one BC. I love your vocabulary also. Great job, deep meaning. You always can make me take a step back and think about things. thankyou for that.
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i really like how you wrote this but will possibly comment later on the meanings...i have to get some things done now...
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