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In The Arms Of God.

Like a rag doll

I'm dragged around

left to cry and lay on the ground.

Blood stained walls and box for a bed

He comes in and I get a whack round the head.

Abuse in my face and Im only young

across the room my body is flung.

My parents hate and say I'm always wrong

they say that 'Hell' is the place its where I belong.

I'm called the worlds only mistake and they want me dead

one time they punched me so hard every part of me bled.

I'm just a girl I try to scream out,

but when ever I do I'm chucked about.

This has been happening for so long now,

I sit in my room and wonder how.

With a messed up face and no one to love

I let god take me, take me to the above.

I feel better now and God holds my hand

I'm glad he loves me and that he can understand.

He says I was a victim but he loves me so much

I walk in the clouds and its his hand I clutch.

I feel loved and alive, yet I'm up in heaven dead

still thinking of all the  bad things my parents said.

Im in his arms and he loves me so

me and him together watching over the victims below.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 



 

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Ok this was random. :| It isnt real.

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  • broken-angel
    September 15
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    very powerful, loved it xx

  • God, that's a really poerful poem!

    Wow...Excellent writing, tight rhyme that didn't seem forced.

    Great write here.

  • I loved it great feeling in this poem!!

  • wow... My gosh this is so powerful. you create such a vivid image of the torture and abuse you endured. I can see why others like it as much as me it is truly amazing!


  • stargazer.
    May 14
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    no.

  • Not what I expected when I first read this. I can realte to this sadly I am sorry this happened to you.


    The Positives:

    Great emotion it really tales a tragic story

    Room For Improvement:
    Nothing I can see you did wonderful



    My Favorite Part:
    This has been happening for so long now,

    I sit in my room and wonder how.

    With a messed up face and no one to love

    I let god take me, take me to the above.

    I feel better now and God holds my hand


    I loved this from beging to end
    Overall:

    I give this an 8/10 you did great. I hope to see you in my future contests thanks so much for entering.

    ~*~Apathetic Poison~*~


  • Umi Juvariel
    April 9

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    I've actually been through this, so I can relate. My parents weren't exactly approving of my birth, and made sure I knew it. Excellent write and good luck in my contest.

  • wow this makes me sad. You are a girl I'm sure and you won't go to Hell
    God loves you just like the rest of us. I promise Stay strong


  • EmoAngel14
    March 15
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    wow

    i love it

  • This is a very awesome poem.Rock On!

    I loved this poem, and that is why you are in my group!


  • stepbystep
    March 1
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    holy, cow.

    that was deeply touching.
    wow.
    but, i love it.

  • good!!

    great original work!!keep it up


  • HannahsDead
    February 27
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    its beautiful i love it


  • Beautiful-N-Broken silver member
    February 24

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    Oh my gosh little sis, this made me cry. That's three in a row today, geesh, maybe I need to step away from the computer for a minute. This is a terrific write. I hope it makes ppl more aware of the types of things going on all around us. Love ya!


  • poetmaster32
    February 22
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    very emotional , it felt very real to me. nice work!!


  • Loftusmom40
    February 19
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    wow

    what a moving poem so sad....

  • evelynxxoo
    February 19
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    your worrds made my blood go cold so much abuse goes on its not fair for kids to be bullied by their parents they dont ask to be born yet they suffer at the hands of these monsters and at a young age what choices do they have they are at that age no othe


  • Babiee.Bunniee
    February 18

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    ...wow....

    I'm speechless....
    I love the message it sends, and justv over all the whole peice. But of course I just love your writing lol Keep it up I enjoy reading it


  • Remnant
    February 18

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    There is so much going on in the world, before our noses, and yet we turn a blind eye
    It is nice to write a sad poem about the missfortune of a child wich suffered in the hands of her own parents and then hope to stir emotions and comment upon it
    To me, it is a mokery in the rememberance of any soul who died this kind of death, and what should we expect to achieve with a write such as this?
    To my opinion Nothing
    We are all Suckers we stink, we see the dirt all around us and turn a blind eye
    Turning to God won`t help, simply because there is No God around as for the Devil he is a human invented being, so we can blame someone for our sins and calamities
    I say fuck the lot, we all need to be hanged upside down and qartered, til all our guts are spilled out
    For we are all rensposible for all the children in this world, and we turn a blind eye and keep silent like
    cowards, as long it does not happen to us

    I only expanded upon the point you wanted to make in your write
    Thank you for your entry.



  • pinksnowboots
    February 18
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    I love the message in this poem.


  • Yahiko
    February 18
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    I like the rag doll metaphor...very nice


  • YesterdaysDreams
    February 18

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    I liked this very much... I would like to share a story of a young girl that lived close to my home. She was a quiet girl, shy and not well liked by her schoolmates. She was picked on because she did not have the right clothes and often did not smell good because of the conditions that she had to live in. Her parents had been investigated many times over the years and yet the young girl was given no reprieve. This winter she was found dead strangled by the string on her blinds in her bedroom. She was murdered by her brother. This young sweet innocent being went through years and years of mental and sexual abuse. Not just at home. She found no solace with friends or teachers. As a society we force people to fit in an image, and when they do not they are overlooked. Your sharing of this poem shows me that you are someone that will not do the over looking and it brought joy in my heart. This will be the first poem that I add to the finalists list. Thank you for sharing.


  • Child of Water
    February 17

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    A very intense poem. Finding some solitude is the way to forgiveness. Thank you for sharing your peice
    Best wishes


  • addicted-flaw
    February 17

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    this is really good and when you say it's random i hope you mean those things don't actually happen to u. great poem as usual you write such great poems to be 13 (better then mine) keep writing


    ~as always i'm hea 4u lol


  • hyper thing
    February 17
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    It may be random but is still quite good


  • Shuberth
    February 17

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    Your poems are getting pretty & prettier and I’m now who can’t write poems

    You are talented, you should do something with your poetry really, I’m sure they all will love it, nice piece of write, keep them coming 

    Nice piece of art Natasha and I loved it

    Keep it up !

    Shuberth

  • Crystal-Marie
    February 17

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    i loved everyting about this piece..... i loved the way it all fit together and the rhyming scheem i loved it all!!!!


  • Auburn Sunrise gold member
    February 17

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    you know, I really love it.

    Oddly enough. Regligious poems are not my thing. Religion is not my thing.

    But the hope in this is contageous. The thought that those who have suffered have someone looking over them, somewhere better to go after this... it's wonderful.

    Thank you for sharing this and I hope you have not truly suffered as the girl in this poem.

    If you have, it has obviously only made you stronger, kinder, and smarter.


  • carebear123
    February 17

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    This is so sad. it has real meaning. i love it! the pain and hurt is clear in this poem. oh it makes me so sad. i can relate to it in a way. i just love this poem! You did a really good job!=)


  • XxHidden in LifexX
    February 17

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    wow!!! huni i feel your pain through the imagery and just the way you have written it!!! a brilliant write keep writing huni i love all your work!!! chat soon take care mwah xxx


  • TwilightAngel026
    February 17

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    Deffinately a strong piece. The imagery for the story is very good. Hopefully this is nowhere near true, and it comes from a great imagination... umm ... best I can say is WOW.


  • Janice M Pickett
    February 17

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    If this is from your real day to day life I want you to tell me OK? as for it being a poem, it tells the story very well. A victime who finds love for God through all the hell and allows herself to feel safe. very well written and easy to read. Thanks for sharing and remember IF this is anyweher near the truth for you. I want to know. It can be fixed. Love and blessings.

  • hemingway
    February 17
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    Sad

    You never give up

  • awwwww sad poem but i really like the end!
    Amazing write and i can totally relate to it...
    Great job and a big hug from me

  • Tommys Girl
    February 17

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    wow

    this poem is so sad yet truthful there are those people who dont let out at all and this poem tells it all


  • August Starlight silver member
    February 17

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    This poem is so sad yet beautiful.
    I'm curious as to whether or not this is true.
    Anyway, amazing job.

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