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I Loved Her

Chill winds ride over seven sea's
Taking my heart and tearing it in two
You were the words, I was the way
But that was the day you slipped away
They found you hanging from your bed
Tears of red around your neck
You'd closed the door and locked it tight
Blocked out everyone so they couldn't help
They tried so hard to reach you
But you slipped away anyway
My heart drifted far away
Dragged deeper and deeper into misery
Then I saw your silhouette
Stood there; in the sky
In those clothes you always wore
Beckoning and calling to me
But the winds blew and you slipped away
As I lay there, tears running down my cheeks
I thought about you, your freedom
Flying through the air, for all eternity
You're a ghost, a silhouette
And you're calling out my name
I locked my door, pushed everyone out
I took a knife and left this world
Leaving three simple words said
I LOVED HER
Was all they heard before the sea's of red
And I fell down; to the ground-
DEAD.

Author notes

I take back all the e-pops My prompt was a bit of all of them but most of all the Romeo and Juliet quote.

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  • ChunkyC
    June 16, 2009

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    This is really good. The emotion is very raw and I felt if throughout the entire poem. Good job. I love how you ended it too. :]

    Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest :]


  • Horcrux.Breathing
    May 27, 2009

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    woaw I love the raw emotion in this write its beautiful, however you have nor put witch prompt inspired you and "I take back all the e-pops" in your author notes.Please do so or I will DQ you


  • TearsKeepFallin
    May 12, 2009
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    wow that is some true emotion there. i loved reading it and it really moved me.
    xxredheadxx


  • Dark and Shallow
    April 9, 2009
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    Wow. This is sad. A very emotional write.