I'm made of reflections and
Angry blinking.
Windows without wood.
Some days truth is all I eat,
But mostly it's just the same
synthetic
And "pretentious"
Bullshit I've nursed for years.
And apparently all that
I know is
All I'm not.
I hate being real, but is anything?
What we know is
What we are and everything
We've ever done is
In our skin.
"Life is but a dream"..
But how can there
be anything
Without a catalyst?
There has to be
someone
To do the dreaming.
Puppets with strings
Strange lights
Words
Our mouth can't bend.
How can we digest
The papers
They spoon into
Our blistering?
We are a collective,
We are one conscience.
We are the world.
These words
Void of nutrition
And of muscle,
Sneak between our teeth
And wake the dead.
But,
What are the dead?
Memories of people and
Autumns of brown.
We are the aftermath of stars and
Worlds
Too mature to last.
Too monstrous to be
Sustained
By milk and soft voices.
Left alone to do the dreaming,
Left alone without
A way of
Knowing
That we don't
Know anything at all.
I feel like everything.
A big blank blame
inflicted
On the world
In varying degrees of
Intensity.
At a speed that
Decays
Exponentially
With growth.
Author notes
The title ties in. In the poem we are one thus singular." We am" is trying to emphasise that.
It wouldn't let me enter a pre-write mobil style, but this is a pre-write.
allpoetry.com/solipsistic
A contest entry
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Comments
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Yes
I agree with Laura. Work on writing with more showing and less telling. You had several good images that represented your ideas.
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This is pretty good!
I don't like the title with we am but I think it's because I keep trying to correct it. I know what you were trying to get at though. The poem is very cohesive and I liked how you let everything loosely relate to everything else. For me, it seemed to leave room for personal interpertation. You did a good job on this.
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Yes.
I like the way you started this, but feel that you lost it somewhere in the middle and then the last stanza begins strong, but yet I thought your ending was weak. This piece has potential for improvement...hence my decision.
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