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Box

I walk into the living room,
I notice two new things,
A box that says the beginning,
And a box that says the end.

Picking up the boxes,
I shake them both around,
I notice one sounds empty,
The other one seems so loud.

I place the boxes back,
Am I ready to take this step?
Into obliteration,
Or feeling safe and sound.

Author notes

I'm not sure if i have finished this poem...just...wanna know how it sounds so far i guess..

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  • paul claxton
    November 2, 2009
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    nice 1


  • Nakatrea
    March 25, 2009
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    I likes it... try using less words to say what you mean.. it might be really cool


  • Myth Of Twilight
    March 18, 2009

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    finished or not this poem i think may say more than you meen it to not sure just saying what i think not bad work this poem reminds me of chaos good work

    best of luck
    Kigi


  • Raivyn
    March 9, 2009
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    Skae= Shake


  • Raivyn
    March 9, 2009
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    -Laughs-

    For some reason I think of it as Christmas time... The part where you skae the boxes around -.-


  • Werewolf Avarus
    March 1, 2009

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    So far so good I think Tam All you need now is to tell us the end, which do you choose?! lol, I want to know what happens!

    luv Kate


  • Scarlet-Raven
    February 16, 2009

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    Sounds great so far *whispers* go for the nice box!

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