(read warning before reading poem)
Why do we fear when Death's cold fingers grasp our hand and drag to our fate?
Are we scared of what lies ahead?
Do we not want the place our soul has been resting in to lose its flesh, allowing wild animals to gnaw on the bones left behind?
Possibly it's the thought of pain hitting you from no where bringing forth suuch events.
Then again, maybe we just don't want to say good-bye to our families and not see them again for decades, possibly never again.
Do we maybe, fear for what lies ahead for others?
All Death really does is take us into a new, unfamiliar, could-be evil world.
Who knows, Death could bring us to all we ever wanted.
Maybe a game of Limbo awaits first...hmm..things that make one ponder.
Alas, we shall never know until Death rings the morbid bell that calls us to our grave.
In the mean time, we sit and wait shivering for the verdict of life once more, or enternal punishment.
Author notes
Sorry if its too dark, but this came to me when I saw something and had to write it. Ask what inspired me at your own risk, cause I'm warning you, it may freak you out....
This is the warning. Don't read this if you don't like Death or morbid and macbre things. For people who have read this, what do you think besides the fact that it's dark?
Comments
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hey hey hey! That was the most awesomeness poem i have ever read. Keep the poems flowing!
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Hi Happy,
I think what you are trying to convey
is that it is coming for us all---
no one is sure of where, when, or how
but it is there and we run from it as soon
as we are old enough to understand. It is truly the
monster under our bed .
I enjoyed this line most of all :
In the mean time, we sit and wait shivering for the verdict of life once more, or eternal punishment.
On a side note in line 7 you misspelled Such as suuch
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i know, im terrible at spelling, but on that 1, i think i acidently <---probably mispelled hit the u button once too much. and thanks. idk that ppl would like this poem that much...i like that line too!
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AWESOME!!!!!! COMPLETELY LOVED IT!!!!!!! wow i didn't know you could make up a poem so long. i like how it talks of death
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make a long poem? twin, my dear, dear twin...have you read some of my other poems? this is shrt compared to others of mine. i stil can't get over ur pic, I LUVS IT! i luvs oo too! hug and nuzzle
yes, who doesnt like death? o yah, that dumb lady at school who thiks im 'dark' who'd daughter is as dark as me but doesnt want to admit it! 
pweez make mees happy...
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To be honest, I don't think this piece is that dark. But I really like what you've done so far. I'm not sure about the three questions in the beginning; I think it would be safer to stick with one or two, because otherwise you'll begin to sound redundant. Or at least, that's how it made me feel. But I DO like the idea of a question or two in a poem; it engages the reader and I think it adds more depth. I have to say, though a title is an important part of a poem, though it seems so small, I think "Death's Fingers" was one of my favorite features because I love personification.
Well done. I'm glad I stopped by to read this.
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wow! wat a first! not dark eh? hmm...anyways, yah, i thought that about the title, but i've seen authors who name their piece out of one of the most insignificant parts of the writing. example: twilight. besides the point, i get wat ur trying to say and thank you for your help. the only problem is that i didnt know what else to put in place of the ?s, i mean, wat else should i add? im basically asking why ppl are scared of death, got any suggestions?
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I see what you mean. Try rephrasing the questions you want to cut out to turn them into phrases/statements instead. Poetically, of course.
Maybe that would help.
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thank you my fellow pirate!
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