as the smell
of freshly mown lawn
mingled with the beauty
of Monday's early morn,
I envisioned peace, released
in flights of feathered ease
and for the first time
in my fragmented life
I breathed...
Author notes
Picture is the prompt
Picture Credit: National Geographic
A contest entry
- Delightful Evening Quickie by delightfulmess.
550 points, ended February 16, 8 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comment/critique if you wish
Comments
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Serenity found. Congratulations on your well-earned silver, Rob. 
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Hood-Winked!
Congratulations on the silver trophy...I really enjoyed the feeling of waking up to a fresh new morn and so thankful that I do!...this beautiful write is very uplifting, so I shall be returning to read again...mmmmm! the smell of cut grass...
You have been ambushed by a Poetic Bandit
All the very best...
~Lilac~
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Hoodwinked
This is good- I liked it very much . You put a new way to look at Monday an still enjoy it with love...mac
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ah you can't beat the smell of fresh cut grass, i remember a time making love with ali, on the grass next top a river bank and fresh cut grass, a brilliant time in my life.
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Well deserved of your trophy
I love the smell of a freshly mown lawn. It conjuers up so many personal images of dejavu memories. Thank you for this exceptional write.
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Oh I inhale and exhale as I read this breath taking poem.
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This is an invaluable message.
Sometimes, I forget to do this. I love your appreciation for your surroundings.
Don
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i think this is something sooo many people forget to do in a day....is just breathe... i need to do this, thank you for the reminder....
such a lovely poem..
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Nice! The imagry here is breathtakingly good. ^^
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wow, this flow is excellent, and this was just so exasperatingly beautiful! it really makes the reader for relaxed and earthly. congrats on the silver
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Excellent if i were to critisize this it would only be because it is too short Well done
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sometimes less is a hell of a lot more.
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What a gripping poem, this truly is brilliant. well done
Good luck
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this is incredible
I love the imagry here, and the ryhme. a very good read. Also I have to comment on your profile photo. I love that guy. He makes me smile just looking at him.
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LOVELY THOUGHTS, AND THE ENDING IS SUPERB! CONGRATS ON THE SILVER.
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This is beautiful!
Congrats on the well-deserved Silver!
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very good
dont you wish you could have that every morning! you touched my heart with all of the description it made me feel at home and in peace good job
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Very Nice
This appears to me as a slightly extended haiku very well done and nice imagery -
OH awesome!
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...sort of made me release a breath of relief of my own!
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With just nine soft lines you painted a beautiful picture with words
such silky writing makes a reader want to go out and gaze at the sky.
delightful ! -
I was just browsing saw the Title decided to click on it . Glad I did enjoyed reading this very much You did a very nice job using the Prompt .
The part I liked best
I envisioned peace,released
in flights of feathered ease.
Nice work Good Luck in the Contest.
ED.
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What can I say that hasn't already been said?
You've a talent that most of us only wished we possessed.
Brilliant, inspiring, soft and soothing. A warm hug from a kind friend. Lovely hon. Simply lovely.
Always,
jin
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so simple yet beautiful.... The imagery was pretty fantastic and the flow was really nice!I loved how you ended this poem..
"I breathed" breathtaking!!! wondefully penned!!
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I clicked on this because I love your name, nom de plume, french for "name of pen" or pen name, and was a tad bit reserved because I am not religous. However I truly enjoyed this and found that it was not strictly for the religous, but for everyone, like my old friends poetry. I found that his poem brought all of my memories of him back, and I truly enjoyed that without remorse of hearing a bunch of religous crap that I dont feel like dealing with. Du Rien,
Darkness Hide Your Soul.
DW
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such a serene poem, brilliantly written. i loved the appeal to the senses in this work. keep up the great job!
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nice
congrats on the silver and thanks for sharing!!
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If you want the absolute truth it was good, little shorter than I expected, Good. Sorry my poems are usually long!!!!!!!!
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You captured a little bit of nature in there and I felt like I was really there. Great poetry.
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creative, smooth
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wonderful
Veryy wonderful flow of words, I just loved this work of art. The nature of the poem, ha a lot of meaning. It was a pleasure to read.
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Mr Grand Master Poet
congrats on the Big shiny,well deserved your work is so incredible. this piece is exceptional, you penned a piece of Heaven their Rob, many blessings
Rend;f
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Love it,my friend. A natural feeling, written well.
Congrats on the silverware.
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This is just breathtaking here C
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Oh My Word~
Wow~ this had me balling like a baby
Oy!! Excellent take on the prompt and Gosh I am overdue to be at Your page
Powerful words weaved~ Images grab hard my Friend More tissues I so need
Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Voice~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
Best wishes in the contest too
with much love & light~ Desire~*~
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I like how you subtly turned this inward toward arriving at understanding in end.
well done
ken
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Oh my my... This is an outstanding poem.
Such a suttle take, which completely befits the pic. Thank you for entering my contest.
Delila
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Stunning imagery.
Absolutely beautiful take on the prompt.
Bravo!
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oh how beautiful... i breathed... its amazing love...!
hugsss
becca
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This is a beautiful poem you have penned.
Well done indeed, best to you always.
Tony
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Wonderful
Very creative take on the picture. best of luck in the contest.
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How... serene.
Nicely done.
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