He was so famous for sitting:
"Humpty Dumpty sat on a wall..."
I thought I might as well become famous
and followed the egg-man's call.
"Humpty Dumpty had a great fall..."
Why shouldn't I do as egg-man did?
Count of three - GERONIMO!
Poor, luckless, brainless kid.
"All the king's horses and all the king's men..."
for me, were my parents and brother.
They picked the kid up - oops, they dropped her!
So her head suffered yet another
blow. "Couldn't put Humpty together again!"
911 - no, emergency room!
They put in a stitch, but drop her again!
And so continues her doom.
Author notes
Ouch... childhood stupidity. And I am bad at rhyming, sorry.
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Comments
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I like the modern twist that you have put on an old classic and dont think that your rhymes are that bad. There is a process I was taught called rhymewells though, I dont know if you use them? You start wit a central word, the one you want to rhyme and draw rings around it. In the first ring you would put any word or phrase that would rhyme completely with it, ie if your first word is ball, then fall,call,tall,wall, etc would be in this ring. The next line out is for partial rhyme, ie 'at all', and as the rings get further and further out the rhyme gets more distant, bowl/mole would be in there somewhere further out on a sound rhyme. I hope this helps, I also use these rings when I want to think about a central theme, I put my main theme in the middle and start linking around it until I have words, rhymes and ideas for a poem covering my page, then I do a freewrite and then break it into my poetry xxx
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You shouldn't be telling such lies, you aren't a bad rhymer at all
Great stuff, hilarious and nicely done
Keep it up!
(and don't get dropped)
Jeff
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Sounds like someone's parents dropped them too many times. Hilarious poem. Nice job.
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Hilarious.
This is hilarious! I love it.
I love the humpty dumpty analogy.
It's fun and interesting, and creative.
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